I have confessions
I have not worked
I have written
poems Yes poems
more poems
unpublished
unknown
even to me
until
they come up
like a drunkard’s puke
and as
unwanted tid bits
full of vile and as
pretty as little green peas rolled in balls as
square as carrots smushed and reddened as
seedy and as succulent raspberry parts
in milky smooth chocolate syrups
as
spotted as an albino under a Miami sun
or
as gray as a mountain mist
oozing gummy droplets like maple blood from a Vermont tree
Poems?
Poems yes poems
Written unread
unwanted
by a world racing
to grab a dollar
and never the poetry
bubbled up
for it’s unfathomed worth
in gems of thoughts unthought...
finally thought
Author notes
A contest entry
- Insane Ramblings of the Hermit Poet by Great Cthulhu.
1200 points, ended June 11, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hardworkers and Lazy Bums by Loki.
850 points, ended October 8, 2008, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thanks for entering my contest.
I enjoy how this is written, it's so fun to read out loud.
I couldn't help but read it fast.
I enjoyed this, "
I have written
poems Yes poems
more poems
unpublished
unknown
even to me
until
they come up
like a drunkard’s puke"
And also this, "Poems?
Poems yes poems
Written unread
unwanted"
This is fun to look at, so fun to read and I keep reading it, over and over because I just enjoy reading this out loud.
Good job -
this is great! i love the imagery... how u feel so many ppl dont want a poet's work... its great
good luck and thx for entering -
The format of this poem really intrigues me. even the word chice is a little out there. As for the secret, I would never have guessed. But as they say, your personality shows inside your poems, weither you try to or not. congrates, and thank you for entering.
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this is really good. unfortunately, i'm not sure how it fits the prompt. thanks anyway.
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your mind
has an interesting way of portraying this poem, your thoughts, your work? no poetry. I look forward to reading more. good luck in my contest.. DEEPEST SECRETS REVEALED.... -
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Your use of simile and writing structure is astonishing. It definately paints a clear picture for the reader and grabs their interest, whether they want you to or not. Superb. -
great write.
i loved the rhythm in it
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something different from your usual...and i like it..sometimes we write something extraordinary...such as this...
mal
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There was much to love in this piece...not only for the unique formatting and to die for imagery, but for the wonderful sense of sorrow that buk is so noted for.
My thanks for this wonderful piece.
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I relate to this today. Good luck in the contest.
Lisa
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well done
Good luck in the contest.
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Colorful! I just lost my appetite though, this is graphic and honest.
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Understandable that not everything is successful in life, but honestly we can work on that...honesty is always the best policy.
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Muse in control?
I really enjoyed this with its free write feel. I loved the stew like consistency of the imagery in these lines: "pretty as little green peas rolled in balls as
square as carrots smushed and reddened as
seedy as succulent raspberry parts
in milky smooth chocolate syrups as
spotted as an albino under a Miami sun"
Wonderfully random and surreal. Keep your pen to the page and thanks for entering.
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Great write, very unusuall and unique in both it's form and content, although I have to say the middle does seem a little bit excessive and crammed in there. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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This is a wonderful poem, but go read the rules again, you don't seem to understand the prompts or the rules.
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Not sure about this one - I love the beginning and end but the middle - however stunning the metaphor - just seems excess. But beautifully done.
Thanks for entering,
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unfathomed or not a poets a muse inspired by another muse sometimes muses go un appreciated and thats okay cause their real reward is some where down the line someone is gonna learn something from them and they can carry for their life
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I reall y like this poem.. the feel of not being wanted
thank you for entering and sharing your poem to the contest
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This was a very good read, unusual in places, 'a drunkard's puke'? But it flowed nicely well penned as they say! Good luck!
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this was a wonderful write and was different because it was your voice speaking out loud and clear
this was wonderful
well done
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