my mother was very sick you see
termanally ill
thinking of that time right now
still gives me a chill
the cancer within was killing her;
20% chance she'd live
by this time i had lost faith
a feeling i wont outlive
i wanted her to get through it
and stay forever strong
but in the back of my mind i new
it wouldnt be long.
it weakened her more and more
each and everyday
untill the doctors finally said
i'm sorry she cant stay.
this is a very painful story
as true as it may be
of the time when i lost faith
and, well, so did she...
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well as you can see i lost my mother and when she got sick we got told it was about a 20% chance she'd live and then i new my she was loosing faith and begining to give up so i started to as well...
i dont know if this is what you were looking for i hope you like it anyway
Please tell me what you think
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Are you sure you are not my twin? Oh my goodness ... My mother is dying right now ... of Lung Cancer ... also known as COPD ... and she is not doing well ... for the longest time ... I didn't want to accept it ... and I wouldn't talk to her about her dying ... or moving on ... I wouldn't have it ... and then one day ... we had a scare ... and I had no choice but to finally live up to the fact that I am losing her ... and had to start taking responsibility ... I swear to god ... you and I really are like Identicle Twins ... Everything you are going through ... or have gone through ... is identicle to the what I am going through ... I do believe we should talk more ... I think we could really help each other ... beautifully sad piece though ... it was penned very well ... Thank you for sharing it with us ... Much Love ... Sparkeh
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hope you get better soon
this is really sad, i feel so bad for some reason.
anyway great write it wasnt dodgey, but i didnt ubderstand it in some places
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great poem!....oh and sorry! about your mother
omg! sorry about your mother!...i dont think there are any words i can say to make things better, i lost my aunty to cancer(a brain tuma) and i was broken so i cant imagine what its like to lose a mother to it.. awesome poem btw you really have a talent...keep it up.
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thank you so much.. and dont be sorry. i dont need or want anybody sympothy.
im happy you liked this poem. and i am so sorry about ur aunty
take care, much love
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I am so sorry! I hate hearing stuff like this. It is so sad! I never had a mother to be by my side so I understand the importance of their presence. And I also know exactly what it feels like to lose faith. Yet I can never honestly say that I know how you feel because it would be a lie. However, I am sure that she would want you to be happy. So live your life to the fullest because after a while you'd feel so low that you wouldn't even know how to anymore!
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wow... thanks for the comment, and ur right "So live your life to the fullest because after a while you'd feel so low that you wouldn't even know how to anymore!"
your comment and applause means alot to me. thanks
i am sorry you never had a mother, it must of been tough for you growing up and everything..
much love
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Brilliant write, although I think the glitter takes more than it adds.
Just plain verse would lend itself better... in my opinion.
My nan's recovering from cancer at the moment, but 'still getting weaker.
I know it's nothing the same, but take care,
=> Jess
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Thansk again for commenting. i was going to do it free verse but im not very good at that. i'v only written about 3 poems like that, and they didnt turn out very well. i find it alot easier to write to a structure. but thank you for the advice. i hope everything works out with ur nan too
much love
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Oh this is so sad
I am so sorry you lost your mum and in such painful circumstances. I am also sad you both lost your faith.
You have written your feelings with such hearfelt love and emotion. A wonderful piece.
Gaylene
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I am so glad you liked it. it got a few i have written about my mum "love hate relationship" "mum" i cant even rememebr the names of them all, but if you would like to here more about her check them two out.
Luv you heaps
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It's great chickie, your mum would be proud of you for being so strong. I can't imagine what you went through back then, and what you're going through now, but you're doing so great gorgeous, and you should be proud of yourself too! Well done on a great piece sweetie, love you xx
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awwww... thank you so much huni, i really hope she would be proud of me but I'm not so sure. im not really that strong, i am always upset and i cant talk to people (apart fomr on AP) about how im feeling. i still have a horrible habit that i cant get rid of. there is so many things she'd be disappointed with me for...
but thank you for the comment...
luv you
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Well done
I'm sure it must be the hardest thing to lose your Mum, and at such a young age also. You show great courage to be able to share your thoughts with us. Keep writing and well done xxxx
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Thank you, i hope she is proud
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yeah it was hard, and right at the teenaged time when a girl needs her mum, but i got by, and i still am now.
its one of those things that other people sort of look upto you for getting through it, but when it happends to you strength comes out as if from nowhere, and its easier that i ever imagined it was, but that does eman it is ease. you no what i mean?
lol anyway thanks for the comment and applause
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Yes I certainly do know what you mean. You show great strength and I'm sure your Mum would be just so proud of you as I am s to you and I
you lots xxx
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