The
spring’s kiss,
falling through beams,
leaves my heart calling
the other half of my soul.
A contest entry
- Quickie by Hadji Murad.
300 points, ended April 6, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is nice. I do like the theme, but I feel the capitalization of every line detaches the poem at whole.
I would change that. The poem at whole is really nice and so sweet. Each word is so soft and vivid and the lines are very lovely. Thank you for entering this and best of luck.
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very nice.
Whether its the kiss of spring or a spring kiss, both are delightful and sweet to have. Nice write.
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So vivid
What a wonderful visual poem. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
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