One last breath,
What would I breathe in?
One last word,
What would I say?
One last friend,
Who would it be?
One last I love you,
Would anybody care?
Please tell me what you think
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Such a sad poem - one is certainly down in this situation; feeling lost and alone. Think all go through these times and hopefully there will be someone there for you that will bring out out of this deep hole. Easy to read and understand, good flow and sentiments well expressed in these lines. Keep writing - a good outlet for emotions.
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Hood-Wink
I would. So many feelings in so little words. But you have said and asked it all. It makes one wonder. I think at some point we all wonder how we would feel when our lives journey was ending. Great emotion.
You have just been Hood-Winked by a Poetic Bandit
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great piece
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Beautiful. It is incredibly hard to express your feelings in so few words, but you have done an amzing job. I love the way it seemss that you are questioning your thoughts. Godd job
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good poem, short but succinct, right to the point, full of lots of meaning!! i enjoyed the simplicity of this one, and it really makes the reader wonder those questions in relation to their own life. Great job! <3
happy EAster *Jordan
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Oh such a great write, and a very troubling questionj I think we all ask. I can tell from your writtings that alot would care, Me ans one!
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I would care. I love the simplicity of this. Powerful.
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Oh man Poetry. I'm sorry you're going through this. I know that you can't see us, but you've definitely got friends here on Allpoetry, and we care.
This poem is really sad. There's not much to say about it. All I can do is give you an applaud.
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