I wish you were here, (wish you were here)
I wish you were standing here right by my side.
I wish you were here (I wish you were here)
'Cause whenever you're near
I just dont need to cry.
I need you right here,
So there's nothing to fear,
But you're nowhere in sight.
I wish you were here, (wish you were here)
I wish you were standing here right by my side.
I wish you were here (I wish you were here)
'Cause whenever you're near
I don't feel like I'm going to die.
And I,
I need you with me,
I need your company
I feel so alone when you're not by my side.
You make me feel like everything I should be
But I never know when it's too much
And you don't get enough out of me.
I wish you were here, (wish you were here)
I wish you were standing here right by my side.
I wish you were here (I wish you were here)
'Cause whenever you're near
I don't feel like I'm going to cry.
I need you so much
I just can't understand
How did these feelings come into my head?
I've heard it before
But its hard to believe
How did this all end up happening to me?
I need you so much
It's too hard to controll
Everything I've ever felt
Is jsut comming right out
Its escaping my soul
And I can't Keep my hold on you.
No, I can't Keep my hold on you
It's too hard to controll
I just can't keep my hold on you.
Author notes
It's a song i wrote in class... always in class.
A contest entry
- ANYTHING! Seriously ANYTHING! by A Murderous Lament.
390 points, ended April 2, 2007, 75 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Very Best #3 (pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
330 points, ended April 20, 2007, 42 entries
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I love this. Excellent lyrics. Of course it's always in class. lol That's where I write a lot of my stuff. I can really relate. I love this part:
I wish you were here, (wish you were here)
I wish you were standing here right by my side.
I wish you were here (I wish you were here)
'Cause whenever you're near
I don't feel like I'm going to die.
It acurately captures how one feels with one they love. It's scary being away from your love sometimes, but when you are near them, everything is ok. Great write. -
the repition was nice but then it did stop the flow ofthe poem at times. pretty nice poem. thans for entering.
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I wish you were here, (wish you were here)
I wish you were standing here right by my side.
I wish you were here (I wish you were here)
I like how you kept repeating this part. It gave the poem a lot of unity and made it easy to read. Watch spelling and you could have some really, really amazing poetry. Good work.
lovelove;; Glitter
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I agree, this would make a fantastic song because it is something lots of people could relate to and because it uses simple, uncomplicated language without a lot of unnecessary garbage thrown in. It reads with a great flow and song like quality. Would love to hear it set to music. Well done, I really enjoyed this write.
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this could make an awesome song, with the right melody and vocals and such, I'd definately buy it once it hit stores!
Keep up the great work!
Luv coop
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This was a fantastic little song my friend read easy beautiful worded, had to laugh though at the author notes you wrote it in class, just took me back to when i was at school in math class I would draw english class draw history draw. Best of luck in the contest also.
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This is an amazing song. You have a great talent. I can totally relate to these words.
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