I stop and lay motionless
In the straining embrace of silken arms
Luxuriating in the contractions surrounding me
And willing myself back from the throbbing edge
[Not yet...not yet...]
Her breathing regulates from ragged rasps
While my own is held between fused ribs
Heartbeats slow, not quite in unison
Concentrating on her softening face
As she shudders beneath me
[Focus...focus...]
Her eyes flutter open
The point of no return
Pushes past in that instant
As a tree trapped in a waterfall
Vibrates in the rushing white froth
I feel the tremor start deep within
Like continental plates grinding
The moan of a small earthquake
Escapes in a long sigh
With eyes locked in that knowing stare
We measure my two separate pulse beats
And amid the spreading warmth
We smile...
Author notes
Thanks for the inspiration...
A contest entry
- Wonderful Words [CONTEST] by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended March 26, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is amazing wow am i glad i clicked on your profile...your imagination is inspiring well done on the gold utterly deserved xxx
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Perfect!!!
Breathtaking!!! You have done this image true justice!!!
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my favouritest poems are the ones that you forget you're reading. which is strange, because words are my best thing. but god i love to forget and just fall past the words into life. exquisite.
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beautiful
Jim this was absolutely beautiful and amazing. I love how you so carefully, so brilliantly described one of the most intense moments in life. Your words were flawless, your imagery fascinating, and it was so sweet!
I love your work! Great job!!!
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lol. this made me laugh. i guess cuz i am immature. it sounds like the speaker is trying to hold in his.... ummm... climax.... and then it just happens anyway... but somehow it was very pretty.
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WOW
Oh my ..hermm ..Brilliant !!
And worthy of gold...congratulations...
and thank you so much for sharing...
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And thank you for sharing your comments. They are most appreciated!
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first, congratulations on the gold. secondly, i am definitely awake now. normally, i prefer to see punctuation in a write however, this one is not hindered at all for the lack of it. thank you for opening my eyes here. viyanna rosemarie
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I think you did an excellent job of a composing a piece that can make you a little hot under the collar without being vulgar. Very passionate, and a great interpretation of the word tremor. Definitely gold worthy. Congratulations on the win! >pixxie<
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very sensual without being smutty. that is nice to see. congratulations on the well deserved gold for this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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hot!
This was sultry and it made me blush! It was tender and focused on the pleasure of your lover and it made me think of love at its best. Wouldnt it be great if it always went this way? Maybe you should publish this in a how-to sex manual. LOL -
ooooh!
how incredibly tender and sexy, reminds me of the comfort of people who have been together a long time. very very beautiful.
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EXQUISITE! There is so much beauty in your words... so much feeling. You have giving this entire piece life and breath. This is truly divine. I am pleased you found something to inspire you. Bless your muse! Thank you for taking the time and effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
♥ Touchof1der
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Well it was your word that inspired this. I'm glad you liked it and I thank you for your effusive praise...
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This is shall I say breathtaking
very well written -it has so much of surge- romance- sesouseness -and all very beautifully put-
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So romantic and beautifully written, Z! I don't see you often, but when I do, I'm always taken away with your work. Hugs, Patricia
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Gasp
I need to catch my breath here -
[breathe...breathe...]
Gerich veleth nin, mel amin.
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