She's a *pretty* Little {Fuck.Up}
With her blouse always :undone:
& her middle always finger.up
telling -you- just how bad you |suck|
She's seen {it.all.before}
An -experienced- .whore.
>>Beautiful.bones<< {{Beautiful.Corpse}}
t-t-trippin' on x|acid|x in the !dark!
She's the decadent **♥Queen♥**
Of {fucking.every.thing}
Her face sits in little -girls dreams-
Even though hers were shat/tered & shredded at the |seams|
A *pretty* lil' {fuck.up} Daddy would say
To bad he left her on the streets .beautiful.heartache.
{[|Pain-never-goes-away /// when you're a mistake|]}
You can hide in your :glitter:
But you'll never
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Make a wish beautiful ♥
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Did you wish to be a |tragedy| for the *sta*rs*?
Or did you ask, to make it without sorrow
You're much to *pretty*
You Lil'
{Fuck.Up}
Have .you. had enough?
Author notes
I'm Dead Star--x
"burning like hatred in the back of my throat"
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A contest entry
- Glitter Glam Slam [Contest] Dirty Pretty Poets by Rose Dark Thorn.
600 points, ended April 5, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want your best dirrtypretty writes.! by MelissahhMidnite.
375 points, ended March 28, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - strung out && b r o k e n more than an old cassette by PaintedParisPassion.
600 points, ended December 24, 2007, 65 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - burning in the back of your throat. by xstarvingartist.
600 points, ended May 15, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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She's the decadent **♥Queen♥**
Of {fucking.every.thing}
Her face sits in little -girls dreams-
Even though hers were shat/tered & shredded at the |seams|
you know every time i read something you write i love it,
the dirty pretty feeling in all of this is amazing,
im not one for rhymes but you actually do it good.
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thanx doll♥
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i just love this.
it is amazingly written,
and i like the bluntness
and the direction it takes you.
good luck! =]
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Thanx <3
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Totally didn't mean to click submit right then.
Anyway, very well done, and you keep the awesomeness going throughout the whole piece. Awesome job...
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OMG....
I love this!
It's very, very, dp. Powerful, intense, and--yes--fucked up, so fucked up it's beautiful. Kickass word usage and storyline. The punctuation was done well too, you put it in places it *belonged* and aided your meaning rather than just to put it there.
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Wow.
This is amazing!!!!
I love this part so much!!!
"A *pretty* lil' {fuck.up} Daddy would say
To bad he left her on the streets .beautiful.heartache.
{[|Pain-never-goes-away /// when you're a mistake|]}
You can hide in your :glitter:
But you'll never
.F.
.A.
.D.
.E.
Make a wish beautiful ♥"
This is such a great poem!!! -
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Beautiful dirty pretty. So raw and it tells a sorrowful story of being chucked out and left to defend yourself at a young age; innocence gone, childhood a wish... In some ways I can relate, as I never got to act like a little girl, but for difference reasons than she did. Very relatable, really pulls at the heart strings of young girls who have gone through some of the hardest things young girls shouldn't have to go through at all ♥
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i swear, the more of your work that i read, the more i am just completly jealous of the fact that you can take every thought i have possibly thought about having, and just transform it into something so damn beautiful.
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Such an amazing poem. I love it all.
She's a *pretty* Little {Fuck.Up}
With her blouse always :undone:
& her middle always finger.up
telling -you- just how bad you |suck|
sounds alot like me sometimes.
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your poem is like whoa. amazing...i really love the stanza
A *pretty* lil' {fuck.up} Daddy would say
To bad he left her on the streets .beautiful.heartache.
{[|Pain-never-goes-away /// when you're a mistake|]}
You can hide in your :glitter:
But you'll never
.F.
.A.
.D.
.E.
your a really good writer with the dirtypretty style congrats with the contest win keep it up
xXsewn2getherXx
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Your poem is amazing. I enjoyed it all. I love the wish part. It reminded me of all those bullitins you see on myspace and what not. It added class and beauty. Brava
NoL
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wow
amazing write
Make a wish beautiful ♥
luff you
cookies&&[love]
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wow, i liked this. it was really tragic though, but had a lot of truth in it. it just really blew me away, the rage and the pace in this was constant and so pure, that it really kept me intrigued, and wanting more. Aaah, yeah really kept me gasping, i'm in love with it doll.
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Simple amazing written very nicey,so full of imagery which tou've painted so well with your words and this style makes it so interesting, good work.
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Wow hun this is so amazing!! I <333 you
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love it, those first 4 lines are gr8! i love the image this has, its sad but kickass at the same time well done
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i loved this.
every ounce you put into it.
its awesome.
i dont know anyone who writes like you.
you got like your very own style.
and i think thats kick'n.
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I love this. There's not much more I can say other than that. Thanks so much for entering my contest, and good luck.
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This is beautifl hunni ♥
I really love the last part
Love you
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A *pretty* lil' {fuck.up} Daddy would say
To bad he left her on the streets .beautiful.heartache.
{[|Pain-never-goes-away /// when you're a mistake|]}
You can hide in your :glitter:
But you'll never
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.D.
.E.
Make a wish beautiful ♥
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Did you wish to be a |tragedy| for the *sta*rs*?
Or did you ask, to make it without sorrow
You're much to *pretty*
You Lil'
{Fuck.Up}
Have .you. had enough?
omg i absolutely loved that
&& i love the randomness
=]
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