I know she'll never read this
But I could never speak
Some words seem worthless anyway
When eyes refuse to meet
To speak of love is simple
When no one is around
The truth comes out
Much easier while looking at the ground
I told her that I loved her
All that she meant to me
I told her of her beauty
Though sadly she could never see
I tried to tell her everything
While staring at that pavement
I tried to show, I pray she knows
To one man she is perfect
Please tell me what you think
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Your words ring of strongly held thoughts and ideas, and emotions throughtout this piece. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you in all of your endeavors. Keep that pen handy and ever ready for use dear poet.
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"I tried to show, I pray she knows
To one man she is perfect"
These words just spoke to me. There's so much emotion here... I love it. Great themes.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Always,
Cassie
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This thing won't let me applaud without writing a comment in this box. I have a headache and don't really feel like trying to critique anything or make suggestions right now, wish I could just applaud, but oh well...I'm just going to babble for a while, then copy and paste this comment into the comment boxes on the other poems of yours I want to applaud. You know I think your poems are awesome, anyway. So, blah, blah, rhythm, blah, rhyme scheme, blahdey blah, imagery. LOL. Kick ass poem
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Wow, this is great. I can feel the doubt in yourself and the truth of your words. So many times I have felt this way. I completely relate to this. What an amazing write!
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