Tripped over my heart
And I fell into you
Caught on my words
And lay silently here
Blinded my eyes
As I stared at your radiance
Years are gone
But here I am
I try to move
But I'm stuck on you
Please tell me what you think
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This thing won't let me applaud without writing a comment in this box. I have a headache and don't really feel like trying to critique anything or make suggestions right now, wish I could just applaud, but oh well...I'm just going to babble for a while, then copy and paste this comment into the comment boxes on the other poems of yours I want to applaud. You know I think your poems are awesome, anyway. So, blah, blah, rhythm, blah, rhyme scheme, blahdey blah, imagery. LOL. Kick ass poem
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