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La Mariposa Rosa
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Pink Sunset Cafe
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Pinks' Plates
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Dishy Pink
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Pink Side-dish
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El Salmon Rosa
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Author notes
This is blind judging please folks, i will not return comments until after the contest.
A contest entry
- Help me finish the project that's in my head. by bird at rose.
450 points, ended April 25, 2007, 25 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What a superb and pleasing name your first is! I cherish the rhyming and rapture the many messages I found in it. One thing it proposes is everybody will want more than one sheet of healthy sweets like the wings on a butterfly. Adding on to that, species of this insect have lots of colors. That's a metaphor to people craving small amounts of everything on their order, it's so good. I absolutely love this choice, and gracias dearly. To my surprise, it has a beautiful uninterrupted tone to it with my criteria!
A nice name - "Pink Sunset Cafe." I have even made an acronym for it = PSC (Please Save what i Crave for!). I immediately thought that dinner would be served there after reading it. Secondly, at twilight, the sun captures a view looking like a cup which is brought out with "cafe!" So, this name suggests food and drink. Criteria went well especially with a jitter at the third one, lol.
#3, "Pinks' Plates" has a children-like aspect... It even conveys it is a different type of platter, her original recipes advertising everyone to check it out. Thanks for this, it's fairly perky to express.
One more point though -- precisely, do you see the mistake in the first word? Professionally in sound, "Pinks' Plates" is cute but is sticky in the first criteria somewhat.
Sufficiently, your fourth implies that she's cleaning and serving kettles in a chunk of everyday! And, wow, she is somewhat British, LoL. A neat perspective from the definition that the cook shack will be outstanding in it's health and to attract people in, and then, clans shall look pretty. I ok'd how criteria was except for the "y" at the end that had a shrill for slur.
Pink Side-dish brings grins. Basically, I savor this because I see it extending in-menu vitamin research how she may know more about one thing and contribute most of her food to that circumstance whereas someone else may be highly attracted to another need. The customer should begin with his/her own knowledge with home cooking ... and that takes you to that you might only eat there once in a small portion of the day. Nice work with criteria too.
Ahh, "El Salmon Rosa" is soft to read. I can see the paleness of that color in the fish in my thinking. Sure, it's a strong ingredient for a meal sometimes.
People will jump with thick tries to be thin. Delightful although a tongue twister in criteria.
I will still add you to the finalists even though the third one has a typo and a catch in criteria because this is so clean-cut and creative.
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