Falling from the heavens
Falling from up above
She has to be an angel
With wings that of a dove
Little halo shining
A twinkle in her eyes
Hair that curls like spirals
Something's made her cry
Sitting down and crying
Because of something that she did
Cast away from heaven
Because she caused a sin
Her eyes are crystal blue
Her hair a golden brown
Angel's usually smile
But this one only frowns
Little white dress sparkles
It shimmers when she walks
Because of her sin
She can no longer talk
She once had a voice
Like a musical tune
Now she sings nothing
Her voice had been ruined
Walking with her halo
That is now slightly bent
She is force to live on earth now
Because she was heaven sent
White feathers now are falling
From the dove like wings she had
Her wings are completely gone now
And now she's really sad
Her halo no longer shines
But is dull and heavy too
Like her heart it has been broken
She has no clue what to do
Eyes that are like crystals
Cry tears of sadness now
Forever she is followed
By a dark grey rainy cloud
She sits down on a stone
Looking towards the sky
Wishing she could change this
Asking herself why
Years went by
The fallen angel grew up
She was placed in a family
That never showed her love
The fallen angel went to school
She is alone and has no friends
Thinking to herself
When will she be at her end
The broken angel still cries
Through crystal blue eyes she sees
The broken angel is sorry
I know because
This broken angel is me
Author notes
Option 1 Angel(s)
A contest entry
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700 points, ended March 23, 2007, 20 entries
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Comments
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its beautiful
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het i just joined and i love your poem!!
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What a wonderful write. Really heartfelt and the rhyming scheme was excellent. The flow was really nice letting you read it with ease, a wonderful story and a real tug at the heart strings too. For me anyway, cos it's very relatable. Keep up the good work!
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She once had a voice
Like a musical tune
Now she sings nothing
Her voice had been ruined
The rhyme in this stanza seems either non-existant or really forced.
Walking with her halo
That is now slightly bent
She is force to live on earth now
Because she was heaven sent
Third line, I think force would sound better in the past form rather than the present.
Aww, sweetie, other than those small comments made, now it's time for the real one and I only have a minute to spare. This poem was exceptionally well done and sad. Don't do anything to ever get hurt. Remember, you have friends on your side.
~Mia.
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Deep emotional poem. Good flow, and I like the last verse. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Wow Oka, this is so deep and emotional. I really like it, it flows beautifully and the rhyming is impecable, and the words just capture you and draw you in...and builds so saddly to the end where I find the broken angel is you. Only it can't be you, because you're not broken...Wonderful write!!!!
Whyitt U xxx
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So well written! Very sad tale for you, and it is a shame you have to live it. You have a friend here, I know it's better if you can talk to them but I am your friend!
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