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Between Invisible Lines

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Between Invisible Lines

 

Heaven's visions lost within translations
Dreaming in syllables of unknown tongues
A whirlwind within anticipations
Where the essence of scents influx my lungs

 

          Winds of change through spinning, emerald rings
          A kismet desire of my heart sings


Love like cashmere, soft and gentle to touch
As I'm shivering within an embrace
I'm wrapped inside thoughts of- "I love you much"
Where petals fall in memories of grace


          Our love's anything but ordinary
          Soaring upon pure wings of poetry


I've found peace caressing waves of silence
Tenderly touched in my mirror of dreams
The sweetest surrender kisses romance
Moments of splendor, by rose covered streams


          In quiet contemplation, angels speak
          From lands unseen, serenity unique


Nature's tune captured me into her hands
A breach of trust, I feel between the vines
Coincidence stolen, time through the sands
Deceit and mercy, invisible lines


          In the depths of my soul, I still believe
          As wings intertwine, I live what I weave

Author notes

Option 1, 2, 3, and all mixed in with me.
Much love to all, thanks for reading!

"A Prewrite For Celticmoon's New Contest!"

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  • wakingdevil
    March 8, 2008

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    What a beautifully executed piece!It has such a gentle and meek touch to it and yet it speaks miles with its intricately woven imagery and though.I'm definitely inspired now to pen something lol...Excellently done, and good luck


  • Amera gold member
    March 6, 2008
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    Tim! This is beautiful in every respect. It deserves the little gold effigy. I used your poem here as inspiration for writing the "Tower of Babel". Your lines are classic; thank you!

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • tara wilson gold member
    March 6, 2008

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    Tim - this poem is amazing.

    It does not surprise me to see a gold and 77 applause...I would like to leave my applause here, too..



    beautiful poetry...


  • Celticmoon
    October 28, 2007

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    Tim,

    As always your love poetry leave the reader in trapped in awe at the tender beauty you bestow upon the page for all to take pleasure within. Your words kiss the curves of the reader's mind bring to the forefront the alluring romance that lies within each line. Thank you for entering and good luck!


    Blessings
    Bel


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 28, 2007

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    This has got to be one of your best writes...at least of the ones I have had the pleasure of reading. Exceptional in every way: theme, atmosphere, word choice, flow and soft serenity in the life you lead.
    Much peace to you brother....this read has left me
    with a very positive perspective I am sure will carry me through my weekend. Thank-you for that! Blue


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    September 27, 2007

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    Oh wow! This is truly a masterpiece. Such beautifully woven words. Wonderful, wonderful.
    What else can one say?
    Best of luck to ya.
    Storm


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 27, 2007

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    You have woven these words together with beautiful magic! This is truly lovely. The feelings of serenity were amazing to me. This is a beautiful masterpiece, and I loved it from top to bottom! EXCELLENT


  • Stardust-luvr
    September 27, 2007

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    sweetheart you truly do live what you weave from your incredible golden heart of purity and faith. It brought me to tears for so many of the lines brought forth in my own spirit the love and friendship we share togehter in essence of poetic beauty. love you xoxoxoox


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    Have no idea how I missed this one but I can tell you that I think this is a STUNNING beautiful write!
    I can be at my very lowest and your words just reach out, touch my heart, and lift me up
    I wish you love, peace, and grace more than you can hold within
    With much love,
    Sandy


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    Dreamy

    What a masterpiece this is,
    you deserved the gold!
    i loved this Tim, it is so romantic and sensual and beautiful to the tongue to read.
    i sat back and automatically relaxed as i read it.

    It leaves a peacefulness and many wonderful thoughts in my mind.
    i thank you for sharing this with me.
    absolutely magnificant.
    Slán Dolores xx

  • Amera gold member
    July 26, 2007

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    This is truly lovely. You have penned a fluid well metered verse that is flawless. So many times poems like this break meter making the reader stop ant that is where the author loses him. This flows into the most beautiful image leaving me with a smile. I also enjoyed you own unique style of alternating and staggering quatrains and couplets. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera ♥

  • Aurora Ceres
    July 15, 2007

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    A delightfully masterful opus.

    First off, sorry it has taken me so long to get back to this.  I've been feeding my 'OCD' cleaning today!
    Taking a well deserved break and getting lost in your poetic world, again. I truly believe this is one of the most stunning pieces I've read, ever. Poetically picturesque, inspiring, uplifting, soothing, thought provoking and stimulating to the soul. To be honest, I've typed and re-typed this a few times feeling that my comments lack. Not a whole lot could do this piece justice. Just know, I enjoyed it, tremendously. Beyond actually, I love it. My pleasure to read and bookmark.

    Be well and be blessed,

    Bella


  • teardrop gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    BRAVO

    Timothy,
    This is soooo beautiful!! The words just rolled off this readers tongue! You defiantely deserved the gold my friend!!

    Love,

    Rene'


  • coffeeangel316
    June 12, 2007
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    this is awesome and indeed worthy of winning a gold trophy. I loved it. Much luv, Trace


  • esroddo silver member
    June 1, 2007

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    Wow what a impressive Picture

    I see why you won Gold This poem got me in love. You have a master piece here. The words the presentation. All amazing. Your word are alike a magnet to more I read the more I wanted. (Lisa)
    "I've found peace caressing waves of silence
    Touched by love, in my mirror of dreams
    The sweetest surrender kisses romance
    Moments of splendor, rose covered streams"




  • oothesaxmanoo
    April 23, 2007

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    Just w. o. w, wonderful work man, that was purely beautiful, the way ur words intertwined and pulled me into the piece was amazing, my mouth dropped while reading this, excelletn work my friend excellent, this poem goes on those master card commercials, its priceless


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 23, 2007

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    Amazing

    wow..this is simply brilliant..

    I've found peace caressing waves of silence
    Touched by love, in my mirror of dreams
    The sweetest surrender kisses romance
    Moments of splendor, rose covered streams

    This is worth its weight in gold...
    Bravo to you my friend...
    Peace
    ~M~



  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    April 19, 2007

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    Outstanding!

    To be so light & gentle - I'm still thinking of the magical beauty in these lines, the best I've seen in ages!! One can really feel its serene and peaceful flow... This is such an incredibly creative piece, and is more than deserving of the gold trophy - Glad you won, Timothy!!!


  • Rianna Bear
    April 18, 2007

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    first off, i'm really impressed w/how you went with all three of those options. me, i don't care for wordbanks, but they seem to really work for you!

    The feeling of calm and serenity overwhelmed me as I read this goldie! I enjoyed the rhyme and the form a lot, especially the couplets in between the stanzas. lovely! your talent really shined through this magical piece that almost makes the reader want to appreciate their surroundings that much more. Another thing that i really loved about this, is how you chose such delicate wordings and descriptions to describe such a vibrant place in your mind. loved the "rose covered streams" -that's just an awesome vision!

    great job, timothy!!


    Rianna


  • PurpleSky
    April 17, 2007

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    I see it won gold thats awsome! you can see how much your heart is filled with love. great to read a wonderful write from you again as I wouled expect no less!!!


  • Frozentearz
    April 5, 2007

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    Congratulations on your award,
    a wonderful poem with some wonderful work
    Blessings
    Frozentearz


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 4, 2007

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    congrats on the Gold

    Your poem was fantastic...TY for touching us with your wonderful talent, Bro!

    Lynda


  • sunny day
    April 1, 2007

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    Purely a Poetic Heart

    Timothy, Purely this is written from a poetic heart that lies inside you. Soft and flowing was the magnificent verbiage. The rhythm and rhyme so eloquent had me SIGHING as I read on. I love the style this was written in. I am left with a feeling of serenity after reading your words. I want to thank you for sharing and wish you the best in this contest with such a golden work. Kudos for you my dear poet. Love and God bless, Joyce


  • PerfectImperfection
    March 31, 2007

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    OOH! This is just incredible! You have created such an amazing piece with the picture and the phrase bank - seamless, I almost didn't notice them it fit so well. Beautifully penned! Good luck to you in the contest!


  • Whispering Winds
    March 28, 2007

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    Dearest Timothy

    I really enjoyed this write. You grabbed my attention just by the picture, and the write is just beautiful. You really blew my poem out of the water...lol Nah, your poem is great... as you are my dear poeticweaver. Wishing you many blessings in the contest hun.

    Hope you are doing well.

    Much love always,
    Tammy
    ~Your Angelic Love~


  • Desire gold member
    March 28, 2007

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    Beautiful-

    Wonderful piece You have penned my Friend
    Magnificent words You have weaved from the Heart and I see Your parents also came online to inhale Your words of Love
    How Precious~

    Thank You for sharing Your Spirit with us~
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Jalalbad gold member
    March 26, 2007
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    Just my kind

    Of poetry. Thanks for a great read!


  • weaverwonderland
    March 24, 2007

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    Heavens visions and unknown tongues,winds of change. I found peace, angels speak= God's language of Love. He speaks through you.
    Love,
    Dad

    • poeticweaver gold member
      March 24, 2007

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      Thanks Mom and Dad for the visit, I know it's tough getting online for you both sometimes because you stay so busy! I appreciate the encouraging words, and for taking the time to read me. Much love, Your son Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • weaverwonderland
    March 24, 2007
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    Tim,
    Do you know how to express love or what. So very beautiful. You are filled with love.
    Mom x


  • rite
    March 22, 2007

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    Eventhough many in this site and in other places try to use the language we have learned to express feelings and thoughts that matter, much of what we feel and think we cannot catch in words. We can approximate them at best using the verbal and lyrical means that were given to us to limit our scope of awareness. Simultaneously to writing this comment I am in a messenger box with a poet also on this site, pondering on awareness. The cathedrals in Europe are crammed with pagan symbols, satanic symbols. The people who go there do not even know. The god they worship was conjured up by the same spirits who crammed the churches with those satanic symbols. But like you write in the closing verse: In the depths of our souls, we believe, as wings intertwine, we live what we weave. Thank you for creating and sharing. I hope this write will incite many to ponder, love, language and awareness. It is the purpose of this life in which we are present. Take care,

    Chris


  • Wandika gold member
    March 22, 2007
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    Wonderfully done Tim

    Especially liked your last two lines.


  • queenie
    March 21, 2007

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    will justin t may be bringing sexy back but it's the weaver that is keeping romance alive.this is a most romantic piece that fills the senses with delightful sensations.if you didn't already have my heart, you would have surely won it with this.my best to you in the contest.

  • Tempa Lee
    March 21, 2007

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    this is great. i hope you win. i read this like 3 times in 2 minutes. that's how good it was. you got talent and it's not like everyone else's. nicely written.

    ~Dani~


  • k cymbal
    March 20, 2007

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    slammin'!!!!!!

    Timmy--Wait, I thought Justin T brought sexy back?
    Wow---look what happens when you put down that yellow soccer ball and pick up a pencil!
    I love the adjectives, I love those last two hard-liners!!!! You KNOW how I love to drive a point in deep--glad to see it runs in the family!!!!
    Your favorite cousin,
    Little Miss K-rock


  • smiley
    March 20, 2007

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    awesome

    once again you have kept me hanging on every word thath you have written on to paper... You have grown into one of the most beautiful poetic man that I consider to know..

    Yvonne

  • poet2angels gold member
    March 20, 2007
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    Timothy,

    You have created such a beautiful poem! Using all 3 options, and your wonderful soul, you have written your heart across this page in flawless rhyme and flow with such lovely emotion...
    Thank you, Bro for being such a wonderful part of our group and such an inspiration to so many.....

    Lynda


  • earthstar
    March 20, 2007

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    Nature captured me into her hands
    A breach of trust, I feel between the vines
    Coincidence stolen, time through the sands
    Deceit and mercy, invisible lines


    In the depths of my soul, I still believe
    As wings intertwine, I live what I weave
    These lines touched my soul. I love the poetic impressions you made with the words of this write.
    I wish I could write poetic it hard for me. Since I have been at AP I have learn alot. I really love the way you write. To be real honset I love every line it spoke volumes to me. It really lovely. I really do not know how you could improve it. I love it just the way it is wrote.

    It truly rocks. I love it just as much as I love you brother dear.
    Brenda

  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    March 20, 2007
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    Oh my sweet love brother, but this is an AWESOME entry into this contest! WOW!!!!
    So unique, creative, and just utterly beautiful!
    I wish you all the best in the contest; this is awesome!!!!

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