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... Stairs ...

Leading me to a destiny I know not,
slow and steady my tentative steps are,
Stone walls bestow an ethereal feel,
that this path will take me far.

Fingertips brush moments of solitude,
contours of past memories I touch.
Cold stones resound voices I know,
they sing the lullaby I love so much.

Darks corners and dead ends I face,
but despair never was a potent map.
Retracing steps and stumbling a bit,
soon I'll tread the right track.

Damp at places the rain an ally,
some turns are dominated by the sun.
Steep steps make it hard to walk,
while others truly tempt me to run!

Life's endless and winding stairs,
filled with their twists and turns.
An endless flight I'll joyously climb,
as long as fire within my chest burns.

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  • theslayer
    June 28, 2007

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    Whoa!

    Awesome write again! despair never a potent map! Whhhhhhhooooooooaaaaaa! I'd hug you tight if you were next to me now! I'm proud of you! Mighty proud! Youblew me away! Awesome write again...

    My favourite lines,

    Damp at places the rain an ally,
    some turns are dominated by the sun.
    Steep steps make it hard to walk,
    while others truly tempt me to run!

    Fingertips brush moments of solitude,
    contours of past memories I touch.

    These lines suck. Period.

    "An endless flight I'll joyously climb,
    as long as fire within my chest burns."

    Cliched. Bland. Pointless. Joyously? Show me one person who has climed the life of stairs joyously all the while! The cocktail of emotions are what make life worth living!

    Typo: Ethereal, not ethreal!

    Again, awesome work!


    • lyrical-rebel
      June 30, 2007
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      i know i know...!! i was supposed to change it looong ago but totally forgot...!! the last two lines JARR!!!... so i need ur help... brain storm with me n help me come up with somthin that wraps up this lil poem perfectly... n speakin of which!!! we shud do a collab someday!!!...


  • Closetpoet1971
    May 2, 2007

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    Very well written

    A wonderfully written piece full of well chosen words that paint a great picture of the various paths of life that are out there for us all to travel.

    Thanks for sharing!
    Shannon


  • JT Sammer
    April 26, 2007

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    wow, I loved it. It's as if oyu captured the beauty of our lives, because life is nothing but a walk to destinations we don't know. So beautiful! Peace, JT


  • Amarillistarshot silver member
    March 25, 2007
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    nice

    a very poetic way of describing the twisted paths of life. a really like it. great write!


  • gullionmar
    March 24, 2007

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    very very well written,maybe you could call it steps of my future,or my uphill climb,or my stairway to the future great writing talent keep up te great work


  • joyya
    March 21, 2007
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    Very well done. Thank you for entering.


    • lyrical-rebel
      March 24, 2007
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      thank you... sorry i still dont have a title... i hope to come up with one soon...


  • okadadokie
    March 20, 2007
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    Lyrical you are a very gifted poet. This is wonderful. Keep writing my big sister.
    ~Oka

  • Amanda 88
    March 20, 2007

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    good!!!!

    aww!!! a very sweet poem!!! you showed alot of imagery in your poem!!!! I really loved it!!! keep up the good wrk!!!


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 20, 2007

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    aww this was really good and it created a lot of imagery in the poem. i really liked the poem good luck in the contest hun

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