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Field of Purity

Among the legends of the midnight
You can hear their silent call
In the books that have been hidden
The haunting shadows in the hall
Forgotten in the past of lifetimes
Not to spread to the knowledge again
Inside this legend there's a warning
Don't let your belief touch them

On the other side of the mirror's glass
There is a world yet to be seen
From the first breath of humankind
No one knows how long it's been
Since the unicorns took their own world
To travel home from the human hate
Never knowing the curse in the old land
Never knowing of their dark fate

In the hidden world of sunshine of day
They roam freely with their peace
Their white skin shining in the pure light
That their happiness again gives
In the beautiful paradise of rainbow lands
In the beautiful Field of Purity
Given free to them with just one request
For them to hold on to eternity

Among the legends of the midnight
You can hear their silent call
Pulling you closer to the small mirror
In the moonlight of this fall
In the full moon you see their world
If your believe lays deep within
You see the flame in their red eyes
As they remind of their only sin

As the moon rises to the early sky
They return to their cursed form
Their pure skin just a memory of past
As their eternity is once more torn
Flying out from their world of midnight
They collect you with their horns
They hunt your soul that hides away
From this ghostly skeleton horse

Those who believe in the horses of night
Will loose to them their soul
To weave together a sky of the dead
To keep in the eternity they hold
Their bones shine in the bright moon
As they fly to you in you fears
Never let go of your fullest memories
For your eternity is that of tears

Don't look in the flame in their dead eyes
Don't listen to their silent calls
Close your eyes and turn your heart away
And you will hear how the mirror falls
Keep your mirror hidden in the shadows
Place your soul there to be free
Never let the full moon touch the glass
For the skeleton unicorns will see

© Janniina Hentilä
January 16, 2006

Author notes

UPDATE 26.3.2007
In this piece I used option #2 but it could partly qualify in option #1 also, as it does have a little fantasy elements (unicorns being in it...).

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Kept in mind option 1 (unicorns are magical beings) and a bit of option 2 also.

A different story about unicorns... What can I say, I always keep on wondering why we don't see them around here. I do belief they exist; they're just on the other side of the mirror like all the rest of the fantasy creatures

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  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    April 18, 2007
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    Nice job! this poem had unicorns in it! hehe! anyway great job! this piece was really really good! I enjoyed reading it! I also Loooooved the background! excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!!




    -Steve-


    • Denierim
      April 19, 2007
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      Yeah it has unicorns in it... lol

      I'm glad that you like this piece. Thanks for your words; they do mean a lot


  • love my jose luis
    April 9, 2007

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    I liked this poem because it was so different from all of the other poems entered, if anyone knows me they know that I like poems that were written differently from what everyone else did and I think that you got that brownie point with me.
    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
    ~Alix

    • Denierim
      April 10, 2007

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      I'm glad that that you like this piece because it's one of my personal favorites from my old poems. There are a few things that'd need some work to be done but all in all I like it.

      Thank you for your kinds words; they mean a lot to me


  • BloodCrusted
    April 7, 2007

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    Very nice.
    Imagination. Wonders. Very thoughtful write.
    Couldn't have done a fantasy-ish poem any better!

    Nice write, and good luck in the contest!
    -System of Cyanide


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 29, 2007
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    On the other side of the mirror's glass
    There is a world yet to be seen


    amazing that the mirror can speak from beyond what one sees. i would like to congratulate you on the silver trophy you have earned in this contest. viyanna rosemarie

    • Denierim
      March 30, 2007
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      Mirrors are a good source of inspiration, that's for sure. I've written a lot of poems about mirrors, but this one's definately my favorite.

      Thank you for your kind words; they mean a lot


  • th3sl4y3r
    March 29, 2007

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    I really like this poem, the imagination and hard work that has gone into this piece really shows and is really well done....
    I think the emotions and imagery are very clear, and the poem is easy to read, with good rhymes and flow..
    I like the originality and the use of imagination in this...I love these the lines..

    "On the other side of the mirror's glass
    There is a world yet to be seen
    From the first breath of humankind
    No one knows how long it's been
    Since the unicorns took their own world
    To travel home from the human hate
    Never knowing the curse in the old land
    Never knowing of their dark fate

    In the hidden world of sunshine of day
    They roam freely with their peace
    Their white skin shining in the pure light
    That their happiness again gives
    In the beautiful paradise of rainbow lands
    In the beautiful Field of Purity
    Given free to them with just one request
    For them to hold on to eternity"
    well done!!

    • Denierim
      March 30, 2007
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      This is one of my personal favorites which is rather rare as it's from my earlier days when I wasn't all that used to writing poetry. But no one can blame me for not having a good imagination, that's for sure... lol

      Thanks for your kind words; they mean a lot to me

  • piccola silver member
    March 27, 2007

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    I thought this was a very good write, and it had a great chance, but I noticed that it had been entered in at least one other contest, which the rules state that I wouldn't accept entries that had been or were entered in any other contests. sorry. You have till the 6th to enter something else if you like.

    • Denierim
      March 27, 2007
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      I have to admit that I remembered that rule right after I logged out and couldn't get online anymore. Well, I have up to 6th so I don't mind. I'm just glad if a person reads my poetry

      Thanks for your kind words; they mean a lot. And I'm glad it actually did stand a chance


  • aGent Lemon
    March 20, 2007

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    Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.


    You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got.

  • th3sl4y3r
    March 20, 2007
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    This is so very sad, I like the imagery in this poem it is very strong.. There are a few lines that seem a bit awkward, the last line of the first stanza and I do think in this line..."If your believe lays deep within" I think it should be belief..
    I like the way this poem flows and the rhyming has been done well... I love the land of rainbows behind our mirrors, that we can see in the monlight.. beautifully written, well done..
    I will comment further on judging.
    thank you for entering my contest..
    Peace and light always

    • Denierim
      March 21, 2007
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      I still blame the English language for the mistakes... lol

      Thanks for pointing that mistake out for me; I don't always notice all the typos I make. I wrote this a long time ago so I should've went through it more carefully but that me. Thanks for your kinds words; they mean a lot to me

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