The sun is sinking in the west
And all the sky's aglow with hues
Of red and orange; and a crest
Of purple through the clouds now spews~
The haze of dusk draws forth a state
Of melancholy 'nough to bring
A man to quest a gentle mate
To cheer him, cause his heart to sing~
As ever lower dims the light
And silent clouds turn ever dark
A breeze springs up to usher night
Across the nests of voiceless larks~
And starlings flit o'er the house and tree
As fireflies wink and go their way
A promise of a night thats free
Of cares and troubles of the day~
So nestle twilight to your breast
And peaceful, kindly thoughts aspawn
As from day's toil you take your rest
And slumber till the bright'ning dawn~
Author notes
Written July 3rd, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Night Sky, Love, etc. by midnightwriter.
300 points, ended March 24, 2004, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This took my breath away sis. As I sit here and comment the sun is rising over the mountains almost like in your poem. Almost. Just a wonderful poem...it's like saying "Calgon, take me away" when reading your beautiful prose.
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I saw everything you described in this beautiful write
Dawn and dusk are my favorite times of the day , hmmmmm....with summertime now approaching fast , I guess i will have to start getting up at 3 am to partake in dawn and stay up late to wait for dusk 
Susan , once again your poetic words paid hommage to one of nature's beauties , one can tell that you have a very strong bond with the wonders of it Best of luck ,
much love always ,
Reenie
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a beautiful work of art from your heart
its stunning
So nestle twilight to your breast
And peaceful, kindly thoughts aspawn
As from day's toil you take your rest
And slumber till the bright'ning dawn~
I love how you leave us in this last line
excellent
write on my friend this song will never end
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This was a good poem! I really liekd the stanza:
And starlings flit o'er the house and tree
As fireflies wink and go their way
A promise of a night thats free
Of cares and troubles of the day~
I thought that your rhyming was a little forced in other places but overall this was a very nice poem. Thanks for entering! Good luck! -
This really was very lovely. Your form was clearly tailored for this. There was just a place or two where it seemed as though it was a syllable off in the meter, but when I read through the second time- I found it was just me.
In the verse: ... promise of a night thats free- the only thing you need there is the apostrophe in "that's" to make it a contraction. That's about the only suggestion I have.
Nicely done.
Again, thanks for the earlier reading you've done for my poems. You certainly are amongst one of the pleasures to interact with on here. I shall go and read the other you posted most recently now.
Kimmie -
OH..so very well penned1 The dusk is my absolute favorite time of day. Its lasts for such a short time and then its gone.
You captured its beauty and peaceful feeling so very well!
Great write!
Thanks for sharing.
Mary Ann
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This is so peaceful I am ready to go to bed......-Amazing write...Just complete beauty.....thanks......lisa anne
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It made me feel as if I were there experiencing it. Very peaceful. The Wink of the Firefly. I love that description. I should learn to speak like this. That would be really cool. If I keep reading poetry, I'll get there. Lovely. Thank you, Nature's Poet! Peace & Love. ET
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ahhhh
I loved this one
It runs on to the end just as the sun will not stop setting.
~Scarlet -
"Heavenly shades of night are falling, it's twilight time."...(one of my favorite songs by The Platters). Your lovely words rival the words in this beautiful song! I liked the fireflies "winking"...a very pretty poem, Sis!
< 3 Maureen
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I myself could never pull off a peom about nature, but you, you do it so beautifully and it just sounds like the words just flow from your heart.. Its so evident that you are deeply sincere about the topics you portray in your writing and its simply gorgeous. Thanks susan, i loved it
Lynn -
Hey there! i really like the illusions i get when i read this poem, the picture is beautiful to. Where do you get such beautiful pictures? thanks for the comments on my poems, and thank you so much for you touching words
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another beautiful write here from you, m'lady! absolutely wonderful imagery you used too!
i could see the sunset, feel the breeze, etc,
wonderful, wonderful, wonderful!
blessed be
mike -
A beautiful write, creates some great images and makes you get that serne feeling. Enjoyed deeply.
Natalia -
Very Awsome Nature Poem.....i really enjoyed it and i really enjoy twilight
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The feeling of serenity in this piece is so powering...I can't wait for twilight of this night to fall..tis much as you described here at my home..country living..can't beat it can ya?
Another lovely work, Susan..descriptive,just beautiful...
Much Love & Peace
~Pamela -
this is incredible, i really love it. it paints such an amazing picture, wonderful word choice. absolutely lovely write.
-ali -
Too good Susan, my friend, I can feel this one so well -tj-
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Wow this is very beautiful, u never cease to amaze me with ur writtings. just the wonderful images your words paint in my head.- like i dont know what to say. you simply amaze me everytime i read one of your poems. u have made this experience on AlPo so much more intersting than otherwise thought. u are truely talented and i cant wait to read ur next.
kev -
poetic and soft as a sunset are the words penned here, the mental picture so relaxing set by the voice of this piece.
WSD -
Oh Susan....how beautiful once again. I am starting to believe you turn into a little elf and come observe what goes on over here at my house { this is a literal description of how it is on so many evenings here } I live only 5 minutes outside of Annapolis , but the area here is still very rural , as soon as you are off the highway , and we could invite Wolfbane to come along...I do have that porchswing { well it is a glider } but close enough So what is left to say Susan....not a thing besides that you seem to outdo your previous one each time you put thought to keys
hope this finds you well
Reenie
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You certainly know how to get these Just right :) a wonderful piece.. quite wistful too.. well penned hun
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Beautiful images, Susan. Your rhyme flows so effortlessly. A new favorite.
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A peaceful calm and soothing piece lovely read Susan...Hugs and love,Sherry
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This is an excellent write; the way it flowed so easily reminded me a lot of Walt Whitman. Wonderful imagery...thanks!
Brandon -
Dearest Susan
Tranquillity, peace, serenity and beauty are some of the words that come to mind every time I read your poetry ... Thank you for giving me such a feeling of wellbeing, Poetess! I love Nature; I love your poetry and of course: I love you!
I am sure with your positive state of mind, your health must be improving ... Please let me know.
Hugs,
Myra -
Oh though this is sad it's beautifully written. Even your words are gentle my friend. I love that picture too.
Red -
Wonderful, serene write hun. Wish I was watching it from a porch swing, barefooted in the breeze right now. Love this
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Susan, this is exquisite! You have painted a beautiful picture with a very delicate touch...I am more than impressed! Thank you for sharing this
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Excellent Susan. You have worded this poem so beautifully, and it is very vivid. I love it.
-jey -
wow! VERY peaceful. Better than a sleeping pill....I almost fell asleep reading it, just picturing the fireflies twinkling in the dark, shush of the wind, starlings darting across the moon....sigh....hypnotic! great job!
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Such a natural, vivid painting
colored in words. I see it all
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OOOOOOO.......so beautiful.I do love a sunset and more so a sunrise.This piece just took my breath away.I could see it so clearly in my mind>i so would love to be where you described.
I love this piece hun.
WONDERFUL WRITE!
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