Anger clouds those once dreamy eyes while
Guilt you place on everyone surrounding you
. . . . . I guess your shoulders are
. . . . . much too weak to
. . . . . withstand the consequences
. . . . . of your own actions
. . . . . how could it surprise me now
. . . . . that you tell me you are feeling
Enraged because I no longer made an idle threat
. . . . . I kept my promise to make you pay
. . . . . for the actions you took
. . . . . against my physical person
Nothingness is what fills my heart now
. . . . . no more tender love resides
. . . . . within these walls you have
. . . . . shattered beyond repair
Doubts run through my minds
. . . . . as I try to take the baby steps
. . . . . my mom urges me to take
. . . . . to move on with my life
. . . . . wanting so much to see me happy
. . . . . just as I too want to feel the happiness
. . . . . I once felt before you presented to me
An agenda to commit myself
. . . . . to doing, saying and acting
. . . . . the way YOU feel I should
. . . . . and say I must do
. . . . . to keep you in my life
. . . . . and what for?
. . . . . so the happiness can be stripped from me
. . . . . when the wind blows a different way
. . . . . than you think it should?
. . . . . I want to be free to be me
A contest entry
- Wonderful Words [CONTEST] by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended March 26, 2007, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very Nice
well this is quite a different type of poem and well this is yet another very well penned and written one as well. I enjoyed your structure your awayness to the poem and also your woridng through out as wlel. any ways its just an all round great poem and I absolutely love how well you penned this. nice work and kepe it up
Signed, Paul P.S. Congrats on Bronze
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Wow! Wow! Wow!
This was such a great poem.
I loved the way tha tyou wrote it with three full stops before every line, it really seemed to make it more dramatic.
Keep up the good work!
Kchanski
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There was a song....
By the Veronica's...a sad, familiar song...
"Leave me alone
Get out of my face
I'm tired of love
Feeling so misplaced
Time for you to go
'Cause I know I'm better off on my own, oh
Leave me alone"
You said it well...prayers for your peace...
M~
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very powerful. brings back memeories of when i was not allowed to be me. such relief in becoming free to escape that prison of conformity has brought me life as well. congratulations on the bronze and thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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I see the acrostic form of the word as well as the meaning clearly defined in your words. You will always find people who have their own agenda at heart, even friends and family at times. The thing you need to remember is that you need to clearly define who and what you are and simply stick with that regardless of what others say or think, otherwise you will always be tossed to and fro. Thank you for taking the time and effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
The problem with changing yourself so you can meet anothers expectations is that the other person changes their mind and decides they want you to be someone else. It is like a chess game where each move is countered until a stalemate become inevitable. I think that if they want you to be somebody else, then they need to find somebody else. It looks like you have a good handle on this relationship. You certainly have a clear image of the word you chose. Best of luck in the contest!
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Well, pretty stern, yet sad words you've written there daughter. Seems pretty clear to me what happened/happening - you've made that pretty specific and clear. Interesting format you've used there too - not sure I've seen it before.
Love ya,
Daddy
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