When your soft finger tips,
touch the keys...my name,
when your soft feelings...
make my image in your brain
I love you!
When my hart is full
of pain and sorrows deep,
I love to be with you and then,
I do not sigh or weep,
I love you!
And when your soft body,
touch my body hard,
I feel, I am the king of time,
And mighty like a Roman god,
I love you!
Please tell me what you think
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Ehh! just great
wonderful.. mightly like a Roman God...
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Romantic
Good piece, I found this quite romanic and I liked the way the narrator loved both when life was easy and when life was hard. I liked the lightness/hardness of the bodies. This made me think of power and beauty. Interesting classical allusion to the Roman God, perhaps an indication of the power and luxury of love
I liked the repetition of love, it showed hope and emphasised the love. Just a small point, shouldn't 'hart' on the first line of the second stanza be 'heart'? (hart means a kind of deer, heart is the beating thing in the chest)
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hey i really like reading this poem keep up the good work dear poet and i am very interested on reading more of your poems so if you want to take a look at mine this is where you can find me tina12345
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Transcendant......
A tender poem that speaks to Love's ability to transcend technology and still make itself fully felt; through the loving touch upon the keys, and the images inspired in the human mind by that selfsame love. I especially like the images used here of 'soft body' and 'hard body', well crafted description of computer "love". Still, the emotive quality overshadows the mechanical. An intelligent mind has created a beauty with a sensitive human heart. Sweet and simple write, Ahkam. Peace to you, Rhonda
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that's so romantic,gentle,sweet n really lovely n light,great poem
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