just when she thought she really was a slug
enduring day after day
of just black and white
just when she knew the pain
in her spine
really was
a tumor
of gloom, metastasized
every inch of her soul
turned Grey
for no reason
every cell and every neuron and
all the mysteries of her body
had turned black and bleak
just like her future,
or so she thought
just when she thought she couldn't take another step
or comb her hair or do her eyes and lips
swimming in jello for days
not caring about anything or anyone
too immersed in her fuzzy sleepy world
not enough wine or pills
or exercise, or food or vitamins
could change her mind
then she woke up one day
and did her hair
put on that lipstick
and that mascara
wore her expensive boots,
paired with sweater from Target
and looked in the mirror
and new her beauty
just when she thought
it would never end
she was again, her self
A contest entry
- Sadness, Pain, Hurt by -Tears Of Pain-.
800 points, ended April 6, 2007, 14 entries
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Deep emotional and very very good
This piece brings everythng close to home for me. Simply because my Father never survived cancer. Your piece is so true though, about the 'state of mind,' of a cancer sufferer. I think it depends on the individual. Whether they are strong enough to see it through, to pull through it. The character of your piece, was strong enough, in the end. I thought you, again, wrote a very poiganent piece. Deeply emotional.
Keep writing.
Wayne
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Noone is immune to depression and unfortunately, the cure is as much a mystery as the disease is itself.
Regards,
Leo Long
ps. Thanks for reading and commenting on my work. I do appreciate it very much. -
you have described this perfectly, something that a lot of people will be able to relate to and be able to recall times they have gone through or are currently living in. Something clicks us out of society and just as suddenly can click us back in. Depression is indescribable to anyone even those who have suffered it because the causes behind it are different for everyone, the result may be the same but what puts us there or drags us out again are different. A wonderful deep dark write but with a happier ending well done, Broad
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this is indeed an excellent and deep write. I am not exactly sure if the "she" is referring to "self" or someone else , but it shows that if we do endure over and over again and still find the strength to pick ourselves afterwards , we have really joined the living......for not only MUST life go on, it DOES go on {with or without us] so if we are capable why not join it and participate. I admire those that do in spite of whatever it was that got them down in the first place,
reenie
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thank u
for those of us who suffer silently with depression, it is very hard to "get up and go" sometimes...a lot of people don't understand...and it's not always definitive what spikes our depression...but thank u for the support!
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Excellent write my friend!! Its amazing just what one soul can endure and maybe just maybe find the light.
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thank you. :-)
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a good poem about how you can get through the rough times in your life if you believe. Great job. i must say. Good luck in the contest. :]
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thank you so much. :-)
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thank you very much!
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this is excellent...life goes on...thought provoking...well done
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thank you!
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I appreciated it...thank you!
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