I don't want to be
caught up in your eyes
they set me on fire
they give me a high
I don't want to feel
like I do for you
you make me so weak
but give me power too
I don't want to cause
those salty warm tears
the sadness in her voice
burning through my ears
I don't want to be
caught up in your eyes
they set me on fire
they give me a high
Author notes
<3
A contest entry
- Ages 13 and under ONLY --- Prewrite Heaven 2 by Amunet Wolfbane.
300 points, ended May 23, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
writer's block!! argh
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Very nice concept that many have experienced, well-expressed,nice motion in this piece.
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Good job hannah! I like the way it flows!
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GREAT flow to this piece and I really dig the imagery as well. You've penned this very nicely indeed :D
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Your words are strong and the reader can feel the emotions involved. You have written this well. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
celticmoon
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This is such a powerful poem. It seemed to say that you didn't want to be in love but it was like an addiction (that's how I saw it anyway). I liked the use of metaphor here like 'they set me on fire'.
Thanks for your comment
Pozo
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Awsomeness Han. Love it, so amazing!!! who is it about it inthe third stanza? JW
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OMG HAN!!
This is awesome! One of your best. Who is this about (if it's about anyone)?
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Cheese. (everyone else- it's a nickname, it's not literally about cheese)
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oh boy dont i know how this feels and you have expressed it masterfully. beautiful yet sad. good work
have a great day
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Thank you
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Ahhh, niceness Hannah, cool poem!
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Thanks!
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