Each falling leaf turns to a butterfly
Soft wings flutter like the gentle beat of a childs heart
How I envy the way that the rain doesnt touch you
As your beautiful bubbles explode into laughter
Did I tell you I loved you today?
Author notes
envy
A contest entry
- ... In 5lines or in 30 words ... by CianLOVES.
375 points, ended March 21, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful Again
Awww this is just BEAUTIFULLY-WRITTEN. Wonderful again, Honey. The imagery in this is, I feel, outstanding. You really know how to pull the heartstrings. Brilliant again.
Wayne
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awww another picture of your lil cutie...are her teeth in yet>? Lol...great uplifting look at childs life and their innocence and beauty..to hear their laughter and catch them enjoying life....good job here!
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Very nice thank you for the smile
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Short.. and very sweet.
I can see the image of a child dancing in the rain... and watching the sun come up to bring a rainbow...
This was beautiful... like always. -
I like it.
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This was sweet and cute. I like the way it captures the imagination of the child in the picture. I think your words flowed well together. This was a great write I enjoyed it very much so. Well done and keep it flowing my dear poet friend and good luck in the contest although I don't think you will need it because I think this is gold.
Angel -
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Spontaneous
I enjoyed this poem in its sweet, short, simplicity. It was child-like, expressing how innocence sees the world, or how one views the purity and beauty of things that are fresh and new, admiring it as well as envying it. Nicely done. Pretty picture. I enjoy how you accommodate your poems with photos and other artistries. It is very creative.
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the child is my little girl
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This is delightful, gentle and full of love.
Keep up the good work
Love,Tom B.
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Awwwwwww.
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this is so sweet and I also love the last line, and you've got some lovely imagery here and I wish you good luck in the contest, Thanks,
m.
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Awwww this is really cute, though may I suggest you capitalise the words? I liike the last line I think it fits in well. Good luck!
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aww!! cutee
its sooo cute. i loved it!!
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