I watched as the memories start to fade
I feel as though I’m an old book, used to many times
Not wanted anymore
Left alone, thrown out for someone else to find
As I’m soon forgotten by the world
With no one to turn to
You promised me that you would never leave me
Whispering into my ear that you loved me
Five years have gone
Have you forgotten your promise to me?
You look at me with so much hatred
As you whispered ‘I hate you’
In your eyes I can see the truth
I can see that I’m nothing but a burden to you
You pretend that I’m a stranger
And as days go by
I know your starting to move on
Forgetting the love we once shared
Pretending that I’m nothing but a mere memory
That the things between us never even happened
I used to think that I could turn to you for anything
But know as I glance through your window
I can see that I’m already forgotten
Thrown away like a book…
Used to many times and not wanted anymore
Left alone for someone else to find
Author notes
Title: Forgotten
Not the best lol I haven't written any poems in a while so I just thought I'd give it a try
A contest entry
- absolutly anything! by nobodys-girl.
527 points, ended December 29, 2008, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i honestly love this...its just...wow...i know how it feels to be "used" and not wanted any longer. i know how much it hurts...any way thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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I agree with Abdulla Zakir's comments ... there is nothing that requires the format you have used to not be broken up a little bit, couplets, long and elegant like these are best with a shorter poem, and beautiful in a long one if set off with an occasional format change for emphasis ... you last lines show an natural understanding that poems of loss and sadness require a redemptive element ..' for someone else to find' may not be meant by you as a form of 'hope' but often the poet writes more than they think and shows more than they thought of showing ... for though youre not waiting around to be found, you shall be and know it.
this a good poem, and you handled the flow of it excellently ... many poets would have a difficult time maintaing this intensity for such a long time
peace
Moqui
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dis b shocking pink btw.... changed my name
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awwww dis is such a sad poem sis. love the words... it made me thnk... dunno hw id survive if it were me goin thru dat
... lol anyways nice write... u know funny thing abt books is some ppl treasure em with their lives.... tatterred as they may find them... 
cheers.
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Awwww SIS
This is so sad and powerfully written,Your emotions scattered through the write with such sorrow and emotional pulls within my heart.I just wanted to reach out and hug you and say that even though you meet people like this in life,one day you will meet that person who will keep that promise...Your write with passion and beauty...I have seen your writes are growing...
Just know that your sister loves you and am here if you need to talk
Blessings
~Cheryl~ -
Thats powerful
For a sweet Young Lady you write like a adult. With such love, hate, passion,etc.... Its a very amazing write. Very well done you have a beautiful start and a very sad and heartfelt end. (Lisa)
"I used to think that I could turn to you for anything
But know as I glance through your window
I can see that I’m already forgotten
Thrown away like a book…
Used to many times and not wanted anymore
Left alone for someone else to find"
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Hmm, I think we've all been in this situation before and yes, the feeling does suck. Ending really stuck with me...if this is relevant to you..I certain;y hope you find someone who won't leave you behind. Lol..and you say I have talent? Well done! ~
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veyr unique, well the phase you tried to express here has been experienced by many..
by writng in two para ur actully kilin off the flow of the poem..its kinda thoughts or quotes..
if u make 4 para - six line 1st stanza,2nd and 3rd stanza 7 lines and last stanza 6lines or 3 stanza, 1st satnza 6lines,second para 14 and last para 6 lines..
it will make a huge impact as it improves the flow of reading and links each other very well.
the depths you tried to touch with the simplicty was very beautiful and symbolisation of a book to your self was very unique.. i was thinkin which kind of book(lol im jus kidding)..
i found a small typo glitch in ur secnd line of first stanza..i think u wanted to tyoe'too' many times instead of 'to'..
i really enjoyed reading your write.. hope you take my comment postivly as i hope to c u agian..
with regards
abuyi
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The moment you mentioned time past, I was caught in this poem, like a man caught by a river, unable to escape its beauty nor the death which it holds. This poem is beautiful...
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good poem. i like how you didnt focus i rhyming but timing. i like it
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Thank you for entering the 25 trophies or less contest.....
You have followed all rules and your trophies are within the entry level
Your entry has been placed within the the finals list......
Goodluck
Tracey
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AWWW
for you to just give it a try you have done a wonderful job with it.The agony is felt so roughly making it have a real feel to it.The sadness is overwhelming and the imagery is great.As I could picture the person and reliving what they were going through.You did wonderful sis
Good Luck in your contest
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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