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Two birthdays

In the beginning of the spring
when the merry birds sing,
rain refreshes everywhere,
and lovely is the air,
trees are in their new dress
and the rainbow seems to caress
the sky with his brush
oh, roses seem to blush!
That’s when one can find the love
showering from above.
The love of a sweet mother
who gave birth to her daughter.
A birth when the earth gets anew
happy birthday, my dear, to you.

Shahrzad
2007-03-20

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This is just a poem for your birthday my dear sister. Maybe it's not exactly according to the rules of your contest.
Love you

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  • Makaskill
    October 18, 2007
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    Wow...This is a beautiful write I enjoyed feasting my eyes on it...Shalom


  • sunny day silver member
    April 1, 2007

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    Shahrzad, These are such loving birthday wishes and I love the feeling of nature that is in your words. Spring is a rebirth for all of nature. You captured me with your words from beginning to end here and I can't thank you enough for sharing the gift of your pen that flows with golden ink. This is absolutely beautiful. Kudos for you my dear sister. Love from your sis, Joyce


  • Wesley Storer
    March 27, 2007

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    Loving Concern

    Dear Shahrzad. Thank you for your kind poem. I always wanted a sister, but all I got was two ugly brothers who never liked me very much.

    • Ir.muse
      March 28, 2007
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      Thank you dear friend for your comment.

      Shahrzad

  • catz Moderators member
    March 25, 2007

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    This beautiful, Shahrzad You've expressed ttue beauty of birth, a mother and daughter forever embraced by that love which survives all things.

    The uniqueness of this sweet poem echoes the transition of motherly love and devotion.

    Good luck in the contest

    love and
    Mom

    • Ir.muse
      March 26, 2007
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      hi my dear mom

      Thank you for your nice comment.

      Shahrzad

  • Sonja silver member
    March 25, 2007

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    This is a very nice birthday poetic gift. May I ask for the same? lol
    ~Sonja~

    • Ir.muse
      March 25, 2007
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      Thank you. Just tell me please when is your birthday? As far as I remember it, it is in the summer, am I right?

      Shahrzad

  • pozo
    March 24, 2007

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    This is a really good poem which I liked a lot. This was a nice poem for Vernal Bloom I liked the rhyme here. This was quite a hopeful poem
    Thanks for your comment
    Pozo

    • Ir.muse
      March 24, 2007
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      Thank you dear sister and you're welcome.

      Shahrzad

  • Sacrificial Love
    March 24, 2007

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    How beautiful

    Beautiful birthday wishes written for beautiful Massy... thank you so much for entering her contest... I know she will love this...
    xoxo
    Heidi

  • wings of an angel
    March 23, 2007

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    This is a great birthday poem you wrote here dear sis, I am sure whoever you wrote this for will appreciate it. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully thoughout the entire poem, well done and good luck in the contest


  • Vernal Bloom
    March 22, 2007

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    Ah sis, this is really a sweet poem and it’s written for my birthday? Ah how can I thank you for giving me such beautiful poem? I really like this and no matter what the rules are!
    Thank you so much for this and best of luck to you in the contest

    ~Massy~

    • Ir.muse
      March 22, 2007
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      I'm glad you liked it.
      Happy Birthday in advance my dear sister.

      Shahrzad

  • Shakari
    March 20, 2007

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    This piece is so beautiful and full of bright and happy imagery! It makes the elation and warmth spread to my veins....as I am sure it will do the same for your sister! Well, I hope you do well in the contest because you have delved into an abstract way of writing, which I love. There is personification, there are metaphors, and the details help us exert our own emotions. Keep it up, sister!


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    March 20, 2007

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    Nice. I like the way you have incorporated seasonal and nature references into your poem.
    Well done.
    jim


  • nell
    March 19, 2007

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    ooh this is a really pretty poem, its refreshing and a beautiful Birthday poem..and you worded it wonderfully, some of the descriptions are really unique.

    have agreat day

    shanelle
    • Ir.muse
      March 19, 2007
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      Thank you dear friend.
      Have a great day.

      Shahrzad

  • Abby100 Mann
    March 19, 2007

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    A GOOD DEDICATION...

    What a beautiful way to dedicate a poem to a loving mother.I love the simplicity of the rendition of the poem.Good use nature's allussion that helped the reader to have a perfect glimpse of the advent of spring.If you ask me I will say this is a very fertile piece lol about birthdays in spring.

    • Ir.muse
      March 19, 2007
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      Thank you dear afro. You will give me the gold trophy then? LOL...

      Shahrzad
  • Puppydog gold member
    March 19, 2007

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    THIS IS SO SWEET!

    This is so lovely and sweet, one that will bring a huge smile to her face.

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