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You Can Never Win Them All

Flames touch your skin but you're frozen inside
My Queen.
When you speak all men trust your lies.
You're green
With your hatred and envy of me.

A contest entry

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  • BittersweetPhantasm
    March 22, 2007

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    heh - this is pretty cool.
    I like the structure of the piece, it is very effective.

    well done.


  • acqua
    March 20, 2007

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    quite a piece, using these words as inspiration and this turns out to be quite powerful a 5 line piece!
    Good Luck in the contest and thanks!


  • CianLOVES
    March 19, 2007

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    Oh you included a lot of the themes in this poem, I like it. Very well done. Good luck and thanks for entering. CharliDARCY x