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CocaineGirlx

I'll be your cocaine girl-
i'll rock your world
i'll be the best that I can be
I'll be your glitter star

I'll be your dirty girl
your glitter girl
I'll be your cocaine girl
Lets go insane

I'll be the best kind of lover
I'll be so much better than-
anyone ever
I'll be your cocaine
I'll be your cocaine;

Inside I want to feel-
like a beauty queen♥
maybe a glitter girl, a super model?
But all i am inside is a little cocaine queen


Lets go *Insane*
I love the pain;
♥



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i love the song cocaine girl by hole.

this sucks though

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  • acidnwonderland
    March 23, 2007
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    It's a fun, bubbly poem. But I don't like repetition.
    Nice though.


  • BloodCrusted
    March 21, 2007
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    I like how you made it feel like.. you want to be something you're not. It's a common feeling, and you made it a little different than the normal poet would.

    I really like this piece.

    Thanks for your entry, and good luck in my contest!

    -System of Cyanide


  • CarCrashHumor
    March 20, 2007
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    "I'll be your dirty girl
    your glitter girl
    I'll be your cocaine girl"

    "I'll be the best kind of lover
    I'll be so much better than-
    anyone ever
    I'll be your cocaine"

    loved those! good luck hunnyface!


  • Kahliya
    March 19, 2007

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    Wow - there is such an air of despair or something around this piece - unrecognised despair
    I love it


  • PaperChainHearts
    March 19, 2007

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    Inside I want to feel-
    like a beauty queen♥
    maybe a glitter girl, a super model?
    But all i am inside is a little cocaine queen


    I love this♥
    amaze<3333


  • Face of my Innocence
    March 19, 2007

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    nice! i love the rythm
    very catchy
    i love that song as well!

    the ending is what i loved the most
    great job lil sis!


  • DarlingUnwrapMexx
    March 19, 2007

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    I'll be your cocaine girl-
    i'll rock your world
    i'll be the best that I can be
    I'll be your glitter star

    I'll be your dirty girl
    your glitter girl
    I'll be your cocaine girl
    Lets go insane

    i like this part &&
    i also love the end..

    Lets go *Insane*
    I love the pain;
    ♥

    wonderful darling =]


  • love tank x
    March 19, 2007

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    "Inside I want to feel-
    like a beauty queen♥"

    I like this babydoll!
    Good job;; I <33 yoooo =]

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