I waited for you all Thursday morning
waiting for you to call home
but you're still there,
standing strong in the screaming
And I'm waking up to a dial tone
and nothing has ever sound so sad
So I take deep breaths between the beeping
hoping for the first ring
hoping for your voice
In my head
you're still call me
"Hey can I come up?"
So I reach in this place
where smiles are embraced
and I feel your heart beat again
I'm still trapped in this place
between you and the sheets
but I've never felt this free
and your breath on my neck
feel so good
I'm stuck in this moment
where our bodies are still
and your fingers in-tangled in my hair
and under your breath you say
"If only you knew"
but the Cologne on my pillow fades too quickly
The bed is made and
my hands are cold
The dial tone is frightening
This silence is broken
by the tears on my face
These bedsheets are freezing
My tissue misplaced
and I can't find the strength
to hang up the phone
I'm growing weak...
I'm falling asleep...
You're hidden in dreams
and I hope to find you there
But I'll still wake up alone,
to this deafening tone
with the phone off the hook
...Three beeps closer to insanity...
...two beeps screaming "I miss you"'s...
...one beep and your still gone...
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Written July 3rd, 2003
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Brilliant.
As per usual, a beautiful piece. the imagery in this is amazing. The realism of it a bit jarring infact. Its intense to say the least. I love the way it rhymes, almost without intent it seems. Very personal piece wih strong emotions, as I sid, amazing. As usual. I guess I really like it because ir reminds me of a situation of mine not similiar at all, but familiar in comparision. Its confusing and hard to explain. Its a weird way my mind works. -
Kala..I've always admired ur writing..u make me so jealous..u have such a great calibur and talent..and one more thing i miss and love you...and the poem was awesome..like always..LoL..~Heidi..
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but the Cologne on my pillow fades too quickly
DOESNT IT??!
I like that line.. awesome write
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"...Three beeps closer to insanity...
...two beeps screaming "I miss you"'s...
...one beep and your still gone..."
wow! I wish you were my friend! you write so beautifully! all your poems remind me of dashboard, or music that i listen to that makes me think for days! and i remember lines from your poetry, they are so beautiful. they are full of heartbreak, and i can only wonder if someone actually caused all this pain to you, ooh that is sad. hmmm... well great job! rock on
~Lauren~
p.s. now i am going to go read all your poems!
Edited on Jul 04, 9:48 p.m. because ''. -
Milton, can you please move your desk?
Beautiful. I love the dejected mood...desperate and despondent, just how I like them. I tried for a good 10 minutes to pick out a favorite part, and I just couldn't do it. You are always so good at writing things in a unique way, but so that everyone can relate. I love you! -Jena -
she looks so beauitful bleeding
heart breaking. i admire this for the intent and the ispiration...and i love it for it's very good. keep it up.
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wow, intense.... i like it! alot, and thats really sad to... im thinking this shows good emotion and it flows really well, i like the way you used the sound affects of the phone, thats really good. Well I think you have lotsa potential as a poet and you shoul really keep it up! ciao *~StArGaZeR~*
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Very good poem...the thing is though,I feel asleep,and i've been waiting for over a week,but it seems that the call won't come till I make the first step. This was very good,a poem I can strongly relate to. ~CWM~
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