I can not take another breath without your sweet amnesty,
Please forgive this poor excuse, this unworthy request,
For your sweet blessing means the world to me.
I beseech thee, to take pity on this lowly soul.
I gravel before you, on my knees...
A contest entry
- Ready for # 6? by poetryality.
925 points, ended March 20, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - master of brevity ~ #1 by Namita.
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I see that you are on-line because of the invite to chat that appears once the comment is submitted. Please refrain from responding to my comments until the contest is completely judged. I like the aspect of BLIND JUDGING! Thank You!
Renee
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I think you may mean "breath" in the first line.
'Tis true, we cannot breathe without the assistance of the great Creator. Your poem spills over with humility and the need for forgiveness. This is a very spiritual work and surely someplace where we need to be sorrowful. Excellent! In spite of the one minor typo, I find this an inspirational work. A poem that those who know an all-forgiving Spirit can easily relate to. You are a contender with these concise. well understood words. Thank you for the time spent to enter my challenge. I wish you all the best!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Enchanting
Heartfelt and begging for forgiveness and love tobe returned. Beautiful.
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