“He’s so Emo.”
So not true
My eyes red
My heart black-n-blue
Don’t label me
For I’ll pop a cap
Lol, do you believe that crap?
I sure don’t
But I say it anywayz
My mind is trapped
In those cottoncandy dayz
Emo, scene
Freakin’ morbid-serene
Candy-coated whores
And blackened wood doors
Trapped in this box
Of hearts and syringes
I’ll break out? This, I doubt
Help me, my breath is running out...
Please tell me what you think
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this is an awesome poem, the title fits with the poem perfectly i loved your beginning
“He’s so Emo.”
So not true
My eyes red
My heart black-n-blue
Don’t label me
For I’ll pop a cap
Lol, do you believe that crap?
this was an awesome way to start i also loved your ending
I’ll break out? This, I doubt
Help me, my breath is running out...
that part made it completely breath taking
keep writing!!!
~Ashley~<3 -
i love this. it rings true to well alot of people including me.
Labels are for soup cans like raviolli...yummy like your writing!
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this makes so much sense i loved it im always called emo! i have no idea why. keep righting your great
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OH MY GOD. I LOVE IT. i can very much relate. my friend has a shorter poem with the same message, tryin to get him to post it up here
(!) labeling IS for soup cans! rock on! lol
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Emo, scene
Freakin’ morbid-serene
Candy-coated whores
And blackened wood doors
Trapped in this box
Of hearts and syringes
I’ll break out? This, I doubt
Help me, my breath is running out...
this was amaazing, sweetie
♥
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oh bby, this is gorgous. i like it alot.
Emo, scene
Freakin’ morbid-serene
Candy-coated whores
And blackened wood doors
Trapped in this box
Of hearts and syringes
I’ll break out? This, I doubt
Help me, my breath is running out...
fell in love with these 2 stanzas...thats the sht rite ther. -
Amazing Piece. :)
Wow! This is an amazing piece. I really enjoyed reading it. I've had a billion different people ask me if I'm emo because of the dark eyeliner and the all black clothing. I'm definitely NOT emo, and I'm not really fond of any label that's been placed upon me. I'm just me..and this made me think of myself. I loved the very last stanza..it just made the whole poem come together.
Keep up the GREAT work.
Love,
Ashley
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You are the first male I have seen on the
//Dirrty Pretty// scene,
&& that caught my eye.
Hun I do like your s.p.i.n. on dirrty pretty,
&& I understand dealing with labels,
they can be a hassle, Enchanting write!
I usually am not fond of rhyme
[[but]] this caught me by suprise
L♥O♥V♥E >>it<<
doll.::.face
;]
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I love it.
Can relate...
People ask me if I'm emo...
every day.
Ughh.
I hate it...
Anyways,
Your poem was p.e.r.f.e.c.t.
"Trapped in this box
Of hearts and syringes
I’ll break out? This, I doubt
Help me, my breath is running out..."
Love!
♥
Mono
Momo
Monica!
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Wow, I love it I love it I love it! This is an awsome piece, well written.
Favourite stanza:
Emo, scene
Freakin’ morbid-serene
Candy-coated whores
And blackened wood doors
I definately think you could get published (if I was a publisher I'd give you my card)
I don't know what to say, but I really do love it!
x x
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