Pilot
Fighter pilots
have fought so many battles
high in the skies
and bombed
so many targets below
Pilots have navigated
the map of the earth
to get to their enemy
and destroy them
at all cost
Pilots use their guns
to take away all their defences
machineguns blazing
piercing the enemy armour
destroying their will to fight
Pilots use bombs
to take out bunkers
and all obstacles
that stand in the way
of the advancing troops
As I sit and reflect
what you have done to me
I am simply
just blown away
from what you have done
You have navigated
through my Heart
Body
and Soul
touching me so deeply
Your weapons of Love
Compassion and your Tenderness
to name just a few
have rendered my defences
utterly useless
You used your weapons
with the true skills of a pilot
to let me feel again
the walls that once protected me
lie in ruins
As I sit here and reflect
my heart beats of true love for you
my body is yours to fully enjoy
my soul is complete
because I am with you
In a list
A contest entry
- Wonderful Words [CONTEST] by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended March 26, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like the way you showed two very different uses for the word pilot. One who defends the body and one who defends the heart. How very nice. Thank you for taking the time and effort to enter my contest. Good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
a double poem
At first read , a poem of a fighter pilot and then you personified this with deep felt love ..an inspired twist of imagination...original ..
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wow, how you have woven two such explosive things into one write holds me in amazement..Love & war and all that it brings...the duality is enlightening and brings awareness of it similarities.Weapons of love left him utterly defenseless...what a beautiful metaphor...Passion sure is in your name as I can see that now...Kudos!
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ok
You should have just made it two poems, comparing War with Love is a great oxymoron, of sorts. It was good, but you should have made it strictly one or the other.
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great comparisons and topics. I have a great support for my country's troops, personally, and I'm glad to see someone who is the same. I love how you switched from the deeds of pilots to love. Much enjoyed.
~Anne
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Flighty!
War and love...Two words one battle.
very creative poem Ed i enjoyed it. I really thought that itwas going to be about planes, then you surprise us with the wonderful you.
Love the use of metaphor with the words used to describe how she makes you feel. You did well keeping it all together.
Lovely.
Slán Dolores. x
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Okay, man, this is amazing. I was completely unexpecting the romantic twist you put in this.
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I like the way this poem unfolds... the comparison of a fighter pilot and the way your heart has been buffetted in a similar vein, the transition I was able to recognise right away.
Well done
~Katie~
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Beautiful
How do you do it??? I have to know your secret please... you are amazing poet despite the fact that everyone believes that a men are all macho & are not to show their feelings... I'm impressed you are above norm This is like always beautiful poem that relates your passions of military & true love perfectly. I personally don't believe in wars, but it's the fact that unfortunately has become part of our daily lives...only if could attack & kill our worst enemies that dwell inside us ...the words are simple to understand but has the divinely aura that captures the audience in a magical spell. You do know me, I love this poem. Take Care & thanks for the honor 
...crazy me
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I know exactly how you feel and have been there (and even written a poem about it too) Inspiring stuff and good luck in the contest. Well done.
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as a kid i used to wanna do that, but i am not to big on high areas, so the sky is out for me,lol, but this is a amazing poem keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Breath-taking
Ahhh, Sweet Passionate Knight,
I never tire of reading your bounty of romantic words
and this time you have created a twist by bringing in the pilots skills of many acts of violence & turning them into something absolutely beautiful & touching ...
Only someone with a soul as pure & beautiful like you could do this
Stunning write
I wish you the B E S T of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Great write Ed, glad to see someone has pulled down those walls around your heart. Best of luck in the contest. Always nice to read your poems. Very romantic. You take care my friend, Sandy
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Ed, once again you have written something connecting violence with love in a way that only you could do. I was expecting a far different ending to the one you wrote lol. I was thinking the love would be destroyed but you turned it round to reflect you as being conquered by love. Great write and I wish you good luck in the contest
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Speechless!!
Ahh, again your words hold such power like a magic powder ... engrossing your reader into it with excitement, vividly expressing your feelings ... like a hidden message for only some will see. Well Done !! One of your best I must say!!
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I am in agreement with my angel friend..this has GOT to be the best from you ever! Wow!
Awesomely written and very creative! Wish you all the best in the contest!
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Speechless
Oh my.....I think I have read the most amazing piece yet. How you mixed military with love is so incredible! Your words have definitely caressed me again and I keep coming back for more. You are so awesome and such a pleasure! Much love to you...smiles, Terry
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