Ring around the Rosie
A pocket full of Posies
Slashes, gashes, we all fall down!
As I ponder, weak and weary
In this cell, so bleak and dreary
My heart calls out for my one true love
My passion flies on the wings of a dove
I cry out for you, my throat raw and red
This may not bring the end I dread
Speak to me of closed doors and unopened chambers
That deadly monster flies free to claim her...
Please tell me what you think
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SUPER!
That was great...
Slashes, gashes, we all fall down...
Puts a morbid twist on a once innocent nursery rhyme...
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i loved this!!! just awesomeness, i loved how you started off with a nursery rhyme then added your own poetry. i loved
As I ponder, weak and weary
In this cell, so bleak and dreary
My heart calls out for my one true love
My passion flies on the wings of a dove
I cry out for you, my throat raw and red
This may not bring the end I dread
this was an awesome part and it hit me really hard, i loved it. keep penning!!!
~Ashley~<3 -
sheer brilliance combining a nursery rhyme and poe with your own style it's orgazmic love!!!
i don't how you do it, but it works
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i love how you incorporated two already existing nursery rhyms and turned them into something so... diffrent i really loved this one
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I loved it all! The first stanza was my favorite. I love how you twisted a classic children's rhyme.I love how you decribe how you almost need the person your calling for.
xoxo,
Your Dumpster-Doll
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Love it! Especially the last two stanzas. Love it! Love it! Love it!
Your estranged yet very cool cousin,
~ The Rocker who lost all
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ooo darling...this is lovely. nursery-rhymes & edgar allen poe mixed....love it. great job hun.
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