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Late

Annoying how
    when after the words are said
    and after the making of the bed,
    clarity makes her appearance

So with head bowed,
    I try to get my tounge to move,to
    release the words that soothe you,
    baby, I'm an idiot

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  • righteousme
    July 11
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    good flow here... short and simple but tells the story... keep writing and sharing...


  • cgsarebeast
    April 10, 2007
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    Good

    I flowed good, and the imagry was good! good job!

  • KatandLRpoetry
    March 23, 2007
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    i like this poem, its a nice style ke pit up.And thanx for th comment to=)


  • poetryality silver member
    March 20, 2007
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    I see you are on-line because of the invite to chat that appears once a comment is submitted. If you were planning to respond to my comment, please wait until the judging is final. I like the idea of blind judging.


    Renee

  • poetryality silver member
    March 20, 2007

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    Loved this! Concise, and oh so very real! There are times when we just have to face the fact that we need to be remorseful and apologize. An excellent writ with no verbosity. Loved it! You my dear pet are a contender. Thank you for this entry into my contest. I wish you the best.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee
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