In the world between the daylight
and the darkness of our souls
In a state of being where thoughts flow
as water o'er the shoals
Gently swirling eddys in the corners of my mind
Stir up cloudy images of things I've left behind
Drifting pictures of the past that float by as I sleep,
Painfully reminding me of memories buried deep...
Words of anger said in haste
Loves and friendships gone to waste
Vainly struggling to turn back the hands of life's eternal clock
Faster now the water races
A myriad of familiar faces
As the rapids smash my hopes and dreams upon the jagged rocks...
Dreaming is supposed to be
a refuge from reality
Mine, I am afraid to say
don't ever seem to be that way
Author notes
Rakerman1
A contest entry
- Anything you desire (1050 points in total) by Blood-Wolf.
1050 points, ended April 19, 2007, 32 entries
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Nicely done! Great wording, emotion, images - and read well.
I like the depth to this - and it's very relatable, especially to those who have 'bad nights'.
Thank you for this good entry.
best wishes in the contest
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wow, your use of words is just simply amazing! =] Loved the emotion and the imagery was quite fantastic. Thank you for the entry.
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Wow this is quite a scary poem but in a good way i think it makes you think and it shows a different point of view of what happens when we sleep, well done great write
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WOW!I like your poem It's very beautifully written! Keep on writting you'll do wonders! =)
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Thanks Sabrina
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i really like the surreal take on the poem and depth of meaning behind it... oh how our minds can torture as so easily... very nicely penned...
Shanelle
and by the way your background is awesome!
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wow. this has a lot of impact and images..plus I love the bg. If you don't win something I'll be really surprised and...I'll smirk! good luck..but luck isn't involved so may the best writer win!
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this is one of the best poem that i have read on here ...it shows things that most people dont see in you... vary good...
Caycee♥
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