When I left,
I said forever,
this was it.
I left you alone,
standing in the cold,
wanting, wondering,
waiting for me to come home.
I didnt know where I was going,
or what I was going to do,
with or without you,
I had to make it on my own.
Suddenly time has flown by,
so swift and so free,
I realized something as the ages went by,
that I need you,
as much as you need me.
One day I returned home,
to find the lights in the house still on.
I sat out front in my car,
wondering what you'd say,
and then I realized,
I was to fainthearted to appear,
and tell you how I love you,
how I miss you, dear.
The next night I did the same,
and for many nights thereafter.
Until one night you came outside,
to face your now known stalker.
Thats when I admitted,
very tearfilled I might add,
that I love you truly,
and I needed to be with you bad.
You admitted that youve missed me,
and the lights were always on,
in the small hope that one day,
I might reutrn home.
Author notes
True love. To the fullest
Wrote this for the love of my life. My soul mate. Im coming home baby, as soon as I can.
A contest entry
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Comments
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This almost made me cry. Well done. A powerful and honest write.
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awww this was sweet...really enjoyed the read...good luck in the contest =]
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Very nice and well written Good LUck in the Contest
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"You admitted that youve missed me,
and the lights were always on,
in the small hope that one day,
I might reutrn home."
Beautiful! -
I like it
This poem is very heart warming and I like it! Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest! -
A very touching poem. I wonder how many drive by hoping the light left on is for their return. The sentiment hits home. I only have one suggestion for the line "I was to fainthearted to appear," "to" should be "too" and the line "You admitted that youve missed me," punctuation for "you've".
I love the lines:
The next night I did the same,
and for many nights thereafter.
Until one night you came outside,
to face your now known stalker.
It was chilling and yet comforting, if that makes any sense.
A lovely write ... good luck in all the contests!
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this is beautiful! so sentimental. I can't get over the bit about the lights. I love it. ^_^ im glad to have found another writer here who's work i like. but then, Sammy reccomends you highly. so thats saying something. best wishes in life and love!
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Awww, this is so sweet. And beautiful. Good work and good luck.
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Good luck and thanks for entering.
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Thanks for entering, and good luck.
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Well, what can I say I'm partial to happy endings. A lesson in learning to let go of ones pride. Great job on this piece. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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What a nice poem.
What a nice poem with a very happy ending. Yes sometimes we go back to that safe and comfortable person that loves us. -
very beautiful.heart felt.
thanks for entering good luck -
Even though you excede the lin limit this was a very nice poem and well written. It also flows nicly too,
great job and good luck. -
this poem is too long plase don't excede the limit for lines. If you wissh you can reenter a different poem.
thanks for entering in my contest. -
Wow, this poem really blew me away. So well written and your verses flow like water down a smooth stream! I'm glad you've gotten your love back. Wonderful job expressing yourself!
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One day I returned home,
to find the lights in the house still on.
I sat out front in my car,
wondering what you'd say,
and then I realized,
I was to fainthearted to appear,
and tell you how I love you,
how I miss you, dear.
you displayed a lot vulnerability in this written piece...the lines that touched me the most I have placed above... love and its idiosyncracies tend to mess with our minds and render us totally vulnerable , a smart person you are though for you recognized your truth and you did not let opportunity and happiness pass you by...I like this piece well done
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Hmm..
An interesting read. I don't know if I have ever had a lost love and wishing for it to return, but this definitely tugs at the heartstrings. I know that I have had this experience with family many times. A good write, keep it up. -
ISN'T THIS HOW LIFE GOES YOU TRULY DON'T REALIZE HOW MUCH YOU NEED SOMEONE TIL THEY ARE GONE. THAT IS THE STORY OF ALL TIMES. REALIZING AFTER THE FACT THAT YOU LOVE AND NEED THEM THEY ARE GONE.
WELL DONE
One day I returned home,
to find the lights in the house still on.
I sat out front in my car,
wondering what you'd say,
and then I realized,
I was to fainthearted to appear,
and tell you how I love you,
how I miss you, dear -
Soo...this is probably the best the best poem you have ever written. I understand every word that you said, and every word you didn't. The underlying message is so strong. I'm so proud of you.
This totally rocks. You are the best, and you totally deserve a trophy for this poem.
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I like this poem. It is all love. Because love is about the idea of lost and found. I think that you convey your feelings so well. I hope that whatever the inspiration for this poem was, that you use it to your advantage. It obviously inspires you. USE IT!!!
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moving
i love it. its excellent. and moves me.
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