Again I saw the vision in my mind,
As if I lived before upon this earth,
Now through the haze of recall I must find,
Those moments that I lived, another birth.
The music of the sistrum I recall,
And lotus columns rising through the mist,
The sacred cobra's shadow on the wall,
The images are foggy, but insist.
The ibis mask he wore upon his head,
He took my hand to lead me, but to where?
Anubis take me to where dwell the dead,
So I that moment once again might share.
For still I smell the incense on the air,
Hear sacred words that echoed through the hall;
Last night I saw the ibis, yes I swear
I saw his form and heard his mournful call.
Of course this could be just a fantasy,
Or something from the past that's calling me.
Author notes
This form is an idea I am playing with, it is basically a sonnet, but extended to 18 lines instead of the classic 14, I have yet to give this form a name, so any ideas from you would be welcome.
A contest entry
- Anything you desire (1050 points in total) by Blood-Wolf.
1050 points, ended April 19, 2007, 32 entries
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Excellent poem, it has a great effect and is well structured, it is a great write and you should be proud
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Sonnet Eternel
Anyways I am no expert in sonnets would like your help there ,,,in my poem "the robin's sonnet"
This dream I call sonnet eternel , is intriguing, it is
enigmatic as it reaches to some very ancient history, images are vivid and colourful ...
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Duodeviginti Sonnet
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well I'm a car buff so I'd call it a Sonnet XL, but I'm sure you'll come up with something more fitting. keep up the great work.
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I've written many of these calling it to all quizitors,my own brand of sonnet. But if you think of a name for it,I'll happily use it in reference.This is a hauntingly lovely piece by the way.
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for through this silence speaks of eternal,
things of what once was, now a shadow of what is.
this has my mind drifting upon the shades of the distant past. Almost a victorian dream... Very beautiful and love the imagry!
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Nice Job
Your style is definately unique. I like the flow, and it read well. THe subject is interesting . I look forward to reading more of your writing. Nice going -
Gentle and swaying...
like gauzy curtains in a warm breeze, or a memory that flits through the house of dream. I love your extended sonnet (a sonnet is such a lovely form); it affords a little more room for gorgeous imagery. The rhythm is like a chant, and with four extra lines, it more easily induces the transformation of consciousness. Your subject is dealt with lovingly.
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Lovely form. I'm sure you'll come up with a cool name for it.
I love the mystic feel of this piece and the questioning - the wonder - that is incorporated into the sharing of the experience.
Awesome!
Cris
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