Out on the darkened lawn
we chased fireflies barefoot,
giggling and panting through dew-drenched grass.
And as though it were possible,
the stars moved with her,
from a million lifetimes away,
the constellations reshaped themselves
to form a sparkling aura
that illuminated her freckled little-girl face.
And for days afterwards, I noticed
she had a slight twinkling
around the hair and eyes
from bits of fallen stardust
gathered in moonlit play.
A contest entry
- Orion by ea.
410 points, ended March 20, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quick Pre-write Contest by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I could've sworn I had commented on this before...the title generally isn't something you easily forget. But alas, here I am now, ready to say thank you for entering
The middle down were my favorite lines, something about putting constellations and little girls so close together in a poem that reaches out and grabs me by the gut.
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this is a lovely meditation on childhood and wonder. Thank you.
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Just love this poem, the whole of it so full of wonderful Imagery and Heart as well, simply loved it, it is so vivid and gentle at the same time and even seems to complement the photo in the contest with its imagery as well as the whole concept. I am at a loss, I just loved this!
Good Luck in the contest and Thank you for this
sparkling, starburst of a poem, my Best to you, you are some writer, dear sir, Take Care,
mi
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Great Write
Love "we chased fireflies barefoot" and "the stars moved with her.". The whole poem has such a heavenly feel. Beautiful poem. All the best with the contest.
Judi
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