you were never guilt-ridden
never apologized
for how you treated me
showed no remorse at all
you just walked way
and left me alone
with a momento
of our summer fling
our daughter
A contest entry
- Ready for # 6? by poetryality.
925 points, ended March 20, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Heavy!
The ending really hit me...how easy it is for lovers and fathers to walk away, like nothing ever happened. So sad... Congratulations for your win in the contest!
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My Goodness! You have spoken mountains of things with just nine short lines. Splendid! The last line was a hard-hitter and all too true in the "walk away" society e live in at present. This is concise and intelligently written with a hard-hitting punch at poem's end. You are a contender!
Thank you for this entry into my challenge. I wish you all the best!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Well our of pain comes joy. I am sure you have love for two parentrs. Too bad the shmuck up and left.
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A sad but also uplifting write, for without that summer fling your daughter would not be here...
Sometimes drama and heartache lead to love and wisdom...
Well done...
Jeffro
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