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When I Cry, When I Miss You.

Oh look at me
At all I've done,
I've lost so many things,
I so dearly loved.
I lost my soul.
I lost my pride.
Oh how I've lost any hope
Of having a good life.
So I cry;

I miss you all.
I wish I was
with you now.

When I cry, when I am sad,
I think of every awful thing I ever did.
I'm drowining
Where no one can notice,
No one can witness,
When I cry, there is no love.
No, there is nothing that can comfort me enough.

When I cry,
I close my eyes.
Each tear fills my body
Deep inside.
Oh how I wish
My heart would fall into someone's arms.
Everything would be alright.

I miss you all
I wish I was
with you now.

Oh, all the salt inside my body ruins
Everyone I come close to.
I can't keep holdin on to you,
My hands can barely hold my head.
I'm so tired of lookin at my feet,
All the secrets that I keep.
My heart is barely hangin by a thread.

Oh look at me
Standing here now.
I've fallen deep inside,
Cannot reach me here.
You lost my soul.
You lost my heart.
Oh how you've lost all of me
Within this morbid lake.
So you cry.

When I cry,
It's lonely  here.
Filled with fear.
I pray with all my might,
That I find myself finally saved.
Out amongst the sunshine.
Darkness to light,
Across the line.
For all of time.

Oh but I am sad and
There is no love.
I don't know where
I'm coming from,
Or where I might be going to.
My heart hangs low,
The threads are few.
So tired of hanging on,
Oh I just may be too weak.
So I cry.

I miss you all
I wish I was
with you now.
I wish I was...

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  • sweetestkiss1985
    March 23, 2007

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    I totally understand how you fell. Because right now this is exactly how I feel. Like I have noone to go to to cry on and yet I have noone to save me from this misery. My family has left me and I have no friends. Except you of course. But painful as it is to say, this piece is as crystal clear of my feelings as it gets.
    Love you so much,
    Bea


  • SixtySevenMustang
    March 18, 2007
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    A saddening read. It sounds as if you either want to move close to those that you love or you want to be in death with them. I cannot discern the two.
    But other than that, it is a well written free-verse. The whole poem flows well, making it easy to read.
    A great write.


  • pattyann4500
    March 18, 2007
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    Andrea, dear, this is so painful to read! You emit so much feeling and agony in this poem, and I am overwhelmed by it. Your writing is getting better, and you've done so well. I'm glad to see you back, Sweetie. Love, Mom