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Ketamine and Heroin [.[.Pills, syringes and smiley faces.].]

[x.Pretty little pills.x]
Dancing in her hand
They take four steps
&& in her mouth they land

A ~numbing~ of the body and mind
She smiles and laughs ___ (And this ones not fake)
As she leaves the world behind

Scarily thin and [x.Oh.So.x] weak
Her body falls to the floor
She’s still tripping she can’t even speak
But just another pill .One.More.

Pink and blue, black and green
[.[.Pills, syringes and smiley faces.].]
Colours that she’s never seen
All racing by her .[Glazed.Out]. eyes

She’s back but her body cannot move
She nods her head and waits
She can take more she’s willing to prove ___ x.She’s better than you.x___
A needle in her arm wont hurt

A lot of love to give
To that >.Dirty.< old syringe
She’s upped a level, left you all
She’s on a mad H.E.R.O.I.N binge

Dainty little fairy girl____x. >[Pretty as can be]<
Sitting on a chair
Passed out and unconscious
With bits of sick in her hair

Author notes

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  • Diatribes
    May 27, 2007
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    A portriat of a junkie Venus.


  • Aquamarine.
    May 24, 2007

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    She’s back but her body cannot move
    She nods her head and waits
    She can take more she’s willing to prove ___ x.She’s better than you.x___
    A needle in her arm wont hurt
    this was my favorite part i loved the poem its awesome


  • KittieLyyn
    May 23, 2007

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    this is beautiful! great amazing job! i can see how it won 3 trophys. just amazing, it really drew me in from the first line. just wow it was like POW.


  • xToxicxCupcakesx
    May 23, 2007

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    Wow! I love it! But you didnt put sparkly rainbows and shiny glitter in your author box so...put it because I love this poem and I dont want to dq you!

    • LaurenLightning--x
      May 23, 2007
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      Lol, I was just about to do it! You didn't give me enough time!! hehe, I'm glad you like it though =]


      • xToxicxCupcakesx
        May 23, 2007
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        now lets just pretend that you put it there and that it was never not there hehe! thanks!


  • OctoberCrush
    April 10, 2007

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    oooh jeese...
    that's deep shit.
    Good, but deep.

    It's written with great intention for imagery-
    Wicked Write*


  • JadedxPassion
    April 3, 2007

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    Wonderfully Done

    Pink and blue, black and green
    [.[.Pills, syringes and smiley faces.].]
    Colours that she’s never seen
    All racing by her .[Glazed.Out]. eyes

    This Is The Pure Imagery Of Addiction In My Mind. You Described This Perfectly! That In My Opinion Is The Strongest Line That Stood Out So Strong. The Choice Of Title Really Was Well Incorrpurated Into This. I Wouldn't Change A Thing About This Poem. The Visualization And Use Of 'Fairy' Was Well Done. I Really Liked This. Best Of Luck.


  • Exodus gold member
    March 28, 2007

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    Heroin addiction is a very personal subject for me. I am not going to say why but I am very picky when it comes to people using that particular addiction in a poem. However, in this piece, I don't think anything else would work. I love the flow of the poem, very fluid. I am not sure I have anything else to say about this piece, I enjoyed it and that's about it lol.
    Thanks for entering and sorry I'm taking so long. Good luck.


  • acidnwonderland
    March 23, 2007

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    I've read this before numerous times, but I still love it. It's twisted, it's descriptive, it's different. I like how it's written. Wonderful job.


  • Sleep isforthe Weak
    March 19, 2007
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    Wow, this is so good. But heroin is bad.

    <3
    Syd


  • x.digital.love.x
    March 18, 2007

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    oh gorgous! this rocks my world bbyface, lovelovelovelovelovelove it!!!! this is exactly what im looking for! great job!

    A lot of love to give
    To that >.Dirty.< old syringe
    She’s upped a level, left you all
    She’s on a mad heroin binge

    Dainty little fairy girl
    Sitting on a chair
    Passed out and unconscious
    With bits of sick in her hair

    last 2 stanzas bby, they won me over, but you had me at hello.

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