Seasons come, seasons go,
what happens when a love won't grow?
Baby blue skies, laughing under the sun,
what happens after everything is said and done?
Running through pastures, wind blowing in the trees,
What happens after you've dotted the the i's and crossed the t's?
Singing, Laughing, Dancing, Prancing,
Once a reall world, now has become a fantasy.
Tears pool into a river full of sorrow,
wondering what will become of yesterday's tomorrow.
Memories play like a film without sound,
Our love, once fertile; now on shaky ground.
I love you so much, it hurts me to say,
everything has a price; now its time for me to pay.
for all the fights I've started, the battles I've won,
the war is over and now we're done.
In a list
A contest entry
- [[Take]]...My[[love]]...Away by murderous-angel.
303 points, ended March 22, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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"Once a reall world, now has become a fantasy." - "reall" would be "real".
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Good job, dear... Congrats on the well-deserved gold!
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this write was really good. i can relate to it because i have been in the same situation once before. i loved this guy, but it just....didn't feel "right" you know? anyway, great write, good job. the ending sentance was great.
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Where do you get your ideas from?
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i m gonna cry i really am it just makes me think of what i did to this boy and how i didnt it to him i hurt him and he'll never be the same i know how it feels and i said that i would never do that but now i have done it to him....but this was just unbleivealble i dont know what to say but you are a great poet and i love your poetry..
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Oh this is so sad. "The war is over and now we're done."
the poem is filled with emotion and images. The rhyme could be a little better; prancing and fantasy for example..but that could just be my rhymer's ear..thanks for the entry. -
Bittersweet
You really struck my heart with that ending! It was brutally straight and to the point, but it was done very well in light of the poem. Lines 11-16 are absolutely my favorite in this piece. It's sad to see any relationship ripped from the seams; especially those we fight so far to save. Some things just aren't meant to last though.
A fellow AP member wrote that you could rip the heart apart, but those who you hurt and hurt you will never be gone from the heart. It's pure irony that I read this one so soon afterward.
It was a pleasure to read this!
Hats off and write on,
Brit
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