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Master Calls

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Master Calls

I heard the call of the Master’s voice
from a dream I awoke
something within left me no choice
of old stories he spoke
and I am drawn into the night
he heals my body of the fright
and I am drawn
and I am drawn
for Master's voice brings me light

I heard the call of the Master’s voice
of things lost he bespoke
for sadness I found no rejoice
on my tears I would choke
I cried a moan with no delight
watching his face by candlelight
I cried a moan
I cried a moan
relieving the pain from sight

I heard the call of the Master’s voice
such power it could invoke
bound to his will without a choice
deep feelings he does provoke
to him I came into the night
carried by a tremor of fright
to him I came
to him I came
for he has taught me great insight

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

For my Ap lover.

 

Trijan Refrain

The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner , consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza.   In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.   The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c  

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8        

source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • indomitable
    March 30, 2007

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    ahem....

    maybe its just me, but i think of a kinkier sort of master when i read this..... hmmm.... awesome write, i can say ive met people who have felt that way, including myself a time or two. i agree with the commenter below, i dont know how you manage to use all these forms and still create poetry that doesnt sound forced. i would have given up ages ago in frustration.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 23, 2007

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    i have never seen this form but i think i like it. your message in this is perfect. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie.

  • hotgurl
    March 21, 2007

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    Great!!!

    Mae govannen! Hannon le! This poem is so beautiful!!! i really "saw" what you described and Hannon le for the beautiful comment on my poem! I know i shall enjoy being at Elf Forest! Ná Elbereth veria le, ná elenath dín síla erin rád o chuil lín!


  • Never Fall in Love
    March 21, 2007

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    yet another form
    You are too good
    I don't know how u have the patience to make your forms
    and still have them sound good
    and still be excellent
    cuz i simply cant do it without aggravating myself
    its an awesome dedication
    I hope he liked it
    Cuz I do


    Never ♥


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    March 18, 2007

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    Very seductive and sensual in a way that creeps up on the reader. Allowing you to slowly feel every line and stanza like a gentle touch from your lover.
    Well done.
    Soulful Woman


  • PerVirtuous
    March 18, 2007

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    From Webster's...


    Main Entry: 1mas·ter
    Pronunciation: 'mas-t&r
    Function: noun
    Etymology: Middle English, from Old English magister & Anglo-French meistre, both from Latin magister; akin to Latin magnus large -- more at MUCH
    1 a (1) : a male teacher (2) : a person holding an academic degree higher than a bachelor's but lower than a doctor's b often capitalized : a revered religious leader c : a worker or artisan qualified to teach apprentices d (1) : an artist, performer, or player of consummate skill (2) : a great figure of the past (as in science or art) whose work serves as a model or ideal
    2 a : one having authority over another : RULER, GOVERNOR b : one that conquers or masters : VICTOR, SUPERIOR c : a person licensed to command a merchant ship d  (1) : one having control (2) : an owner especially of a slave or animal e : the employer especially of a servant f (1) dialect : HUSBAND (2) : the male head of a household

    I think you have brought out a very misunderstood word, and penned a delight to it. The only context where this word is considered a negative thing is when it is used to describe a relationship between an unwilling slave and the owner of said slave. In every other context, even military victor, it is high praise indeed.

     

    Based upon the last line of the poem, it appears you use master here as a male teacher. Then in your author's notes you mention lover. I would interpret that to mean an artist, performer, or player of connsumate skill, specifically in the arts of love. It would appear that you have a double meaning of the word in your poem. The context seems to work equally well with either definition. 

     

    This is a very fine example of a Trijan Refrain, and the content is very interesting and profound. This is a winner on all levels and gets a bunny for each gramar, content, and thought. Plus, it gets one big-old unabashed grin.


  • Elfin
    March 18, 2007

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    I love this piece Amera,it is so seductive, I have never seen this form before but I like its flow and rhyme. Well done my dear friend, I feel that this should be in some contest I like it so much. Val


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 18, 2007

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    Another stunning write...you leave me in awe.
    But, do you think you could erase Master and slip
    in Mistress? Passing you a cold beer and a
    handful of pretzels...
    Lane


  • ehhwhat
    March 18, 2007

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    wow, i really like this poem, very clever in scheme, choosing bigger words and making them rhyme, i guess it just inspires me because i love to write poetry that rhymes and your usage of not commonly used words and making them rhyme influences me greatly! wonderful poem and keep writing

  • Eulb kcalB
    March 18, 2007

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    such power it could invoke
    bound to his will without a choice
    deep feelings he does provoke
    to him I came into the night
    carried by a tremor of fright
    to him I came
    to him I came
    for he has taught me great insight


    POWERFUL , THOUGHTFUL AND VERY BEAUTIFUL...

    let me thank you for your Authors notes I am always learning something new from you , as you already know I nothing of forms...good looking out

    love you
    J


  • magloveschrist
    March 18, 2007
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    great job


  • B Chandler
    March 18, 2007

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    a never heard of form which I like greatly. The image is there but, the overuse of 'I' pulled me away. Keep penning


  • Nature Song silver member
    March 18, 2007

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    Lovely poem for your AP lover. Envokes such passion with each stanza. The meter is well done as well. Great write! ~Sie


  • And Hyetal
    March 18, 2007

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    Wow! A great poem but such a complicated form! I'm sorry I haven't been keeping up with your work, but I promise I will!

    A dozen s for a friend,
    Cassie


  • Sacrificial Love
    March 18, 2007

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    How beautiful...

    i absolutely love this form... you do it so well Sis... the words flow like honey... and I know your love will be very touched by this...to say the very least...

    xoxo
    Heidi

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