And my heart
S
K
I
P
P
E
D
a beat, giving the feeling
of coming in mid-song.
Leaving me curious to hear
what I had missed.
Your rhythm tickling
my skin, as if penning
music notes all over
to drive into my soul.
Though you never had a duet in mind,
and eventually you would
write me into your life,
and then out of it again.
But the notes left by you,
would leave not so subtle marks
imprinted for eternity.
Like a billboard or water tower
that says:
“YOU WERE HERE”
A contest entry
- One Day Duel by MuddyKing.
300 points, ended March 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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many nice phrases
Leaving me curious to hear
what I had missed.
write me into your life,
and then out of it again.
and then the ending
excellent
contender
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great write. i stumbled upon it and was delighfully surprised. i will say that the skiiped thing is a little distracting. ive seen it done a couple of times, and it doesnt really accomplish what its supposed to. but the power of the piece is undeniable. i too was one over by the
Like a billboard or water tower
that says:
“YOU WERE HERE”
lines there at the end. good luck in the contest. -
"Like a billboard or water tower
that says:
“YOU WERE HERE” very neat line. It put an image in my mind and I like that.
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