Sweet riverletes of music running softly through my mind
Washing away the sadness so that peace once more I find
Soft chords are gently playing as they drift around my heart
From head to toe, their cleansing gives new life a place to start
My pulse begins a throbbing as it joins in the beat
My senses in fine tuning , make the opera complete
Orchestra of beginnings makes me feel so wild and free
The body,mind and spirit are at last in harmony
A contest entry
- One Day Duel by MuddyKing.
300 points, ended March 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is wonderfully written, it has a real tune to it, with the words of music are very effective..... It flows beautifully with great wording and rhyming.....
these are my favourite lines..........
"My senses in fine tuning , make the opera complete
Orchestra of beginnings makes me feel so wild and free
The body,mind and spirit are at last in harmony"
well done!!!
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I myself get lost in music sometimes, I enjoyed the write-up it made me see the image of what I go through with music that is so pure and plays to my mind and emotions.
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I love this poem
This poem reminds me of when i'm in church and can feel the melody flowing through the walls even though there's only fifteen people in our church and not very many people are singing. it is lovely and makes me feel calm
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this is very beautiful it speaks alot to me because of my love for music... its very refreshing keep up the good work and good luck in the future
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i ahd to read this twice.Great imaganation and creativeness.
keep writing and well done -
Amazing. the emotion flowing in and from this piece is astounding. The rhyming is perfect.
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Lovely write the ryhme worked very well here lots of imagery and imagination in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
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I actually didn't notice the rhyme, until the second reading...I was more into the state of the poem
excellent
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great imagery and powerful words...i am glad i came upon this poem. i have really enjoyed reading this piece. i love the metaphorical aspect, i love the optimism that you have shown within this...such talent
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Beautiful
Very excellent imagery and emotion in this write. Love the way it just sinks into me as I read it. Harmony is a very key word here! Makes the reader melt and think of it long after the read. Your pal, Don
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I'm often called a cynic, so I usually don't enjoy poems with optimism. However, I did enjoy this one. Thanks for sharing it
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great rhyming very up beat and positive i really enjoyed the read
daw -
I always admire an extended metaphor and this sits so perfectly. As always, your rhyme carries the poem well from beginning to end. I wish you luck in the competition.
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Good Job
I got the vision of a warm shower. Might you have written this while in the bath? LOL I enjoyed the music also.
Joe -
Very peaceful.
Wonderful spectacular write!
Angie
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Wonderful write and a wonderful feeling, surely. You described that particular moment and that emotion well enough to be touched by the reader. Amazing work
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Oh what a feeling....
I would give anything to achieve this state... you have perfectly penned a piece that brings your reader to a yearning for the peace that you speak of...for the balance of body, mind, and spirit.
Great write
and good luck in the contest....
xoxo
Heidi
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