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Blank eyes stare...

Blank eyes stare,
The sea-green fills my head
with everything it wants,

 

It makes me hear the ocean,

smell just mowed grass,

All I see is green,

 

Tears fall,

Yours are clear,

mine are green...

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  • A falling star
    March 18, 2007

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    Hm, interesting. I like the last line. It sort of makes the reader beg for more. Leaves things up to the imagination.
    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Samplette gold member
    March 18, 2007

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    A bit thougth provoking here. Nicely done. thank you for entering the contest. Sometimes others can see clearly than we, or so it seems. Nice job.
    Sam