Wild flames of wrath she spat upon my soul
With soulless anger was her speech adorned
Adorned with self-defensive strategies
Her strategy was war, her battle pride
For pride has brought her to this battle-field
A battle-field her mind was, there’s no doubt
I doubtfully responded to her cry
This war-cry that still echoes in my head
From head to stomach did her voice descend
Descending into cavern of despair
Despair that reigns within my shattered heart
The heartless world is just reflected truth
A truthful mirror of our inner state
I state that all my body starts to shake
The shaken walls of ego’s proud abode
Abide no more in safety’s false belief
Believing that the enemy’s outside
Outside I’ve fought my battle until now
But now that grace has sent me wrathful words
My words in humble silence shall dissolve …
Author notes
a wreath in blank verse and iambic pentameter
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this poem won a GOLD TROPHY in ea's contest :
"write me a wreath" http://allpoetry.com/contest/2343292
A contest entry
- Write a Wreath by ea.
360 points, ended March 20, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow this such a strong emotional poem so full of feeling, the flow of your words is so nicely done, great job.
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This is an awesome piece. Pride is a nasty thing when it crosses the line. Good things come from bad. The way you desribed this was almost nightmarish.
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This is just such a wonderfully balanced poem. As each line links with the other, so do the topics. Nothing feels forced in these, even though it's in a contest. I just enjoyed reading this.
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thank you very much for sharing your feelings about my poem with me ... I really appreciate it ... aaand the clapping bunnies ...
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how kind of you to comment and applaud on my poem ... thank you so much ...
maa
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Oh, you have done sich a beautiful wreath, it flows so gently from line to line. The word choice is excellent, and it is a glorious poem!
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thanks so much, dear suzie, for your sweet words and applause ...
marion
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let me simply say this is splendid
thoroughly ejoyable and well-written. i always write free verse and when i come across a form poem i enjoy i have to respect the talent that created it like this one
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thank you so much for your appreciative words and claps, lady unique ... I usually write rhyme and love meter, so here I kept the meter but didn't make it rhyme ... I am glad you enjoyed this ...
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Wwo thats some very strong emotional words so ful of fefling. Youput them together so well. Nicley written.
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thank you so much for your truly kind words ...
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Caught this in the spotlight today, very strong write, totally comes across as a personal experience...much intensity come through here..congrats on the gold....
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wow, I didn't know that it was in the spotlight
thank you for informing me ... now, who was this little santa-claus who did this ?
thank you so much for your kind words, deb and your gift of applause ... I very much appreciate your attention ...
maa
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You never disappoint, my dear! This is brilliant. Your flair for form is to be commended. I wish I had half the talent you do for form poetry! Your gift is incredible!
~Lori
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dear lori,
I actually and honestly believe that I can learn more from you than you can learn from me ...
but your words touch me very much, because I know you mean them
I love the clapping bunnies, too ...
thank you so much,
marion
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Well written
Love the poem. It was very cool.
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thank you so much, hazydreams, for your nice words and the clapping bunnies !
maa
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Awesome. I really was put off that it was a wreath, because a lot of them that I've read sucked. Just plain sucked. Yours was like a...a light in the darkness of suckiness. Heheh. Great job! You really deserved the gold trophy.
Keep up the great work, maa!
Akasha
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dear akasha,
your words made me smile ... I am just holding a "wreath"-contest for ea, and believe me, if you read the wreath posted there so far, you might be tempted to change your opinion about wreaths
by the way, you are heartily welcome to participate, if you wish ... show us how a non-sucking wreath should look like ! 
thanks so much for your kind words, I appreciate your attention very much,
take care,
maa
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I think you have just given me new inspiration to try this form yet again. What a fantastic example of what is possible to accomplish with a form that is simple in theory, but difficult in practice. I am in awe of this one. The GOLD was MUCH deserved. Congrats!
With love ands
~J.
P.S. Have you tried this form in rhyme yet? Seems like it would be very hard to do, but I've no doubt you could make it work beautifully.
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what a great idea to write a wreath in rhyme ... and meter ... you just gave me a great idea ... my friend margaret did this already, but she's a real master ... so I'm not sure if I will succeed, but I shall try !
thanks so much for the little bunnies, sweet one ...
marion
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Wow, this peice was really cool. It had a really good flow and the emotions expressed are very real. I liked it alot
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thank you so much, angel, for your kind words ... I very much appreciate them ...
maa
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Wow this was so moving such a lovly poem. Which such vivid imagery and good user of words. You painted it so well. Awesome.
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thank you so much, mrs poetic !
that's really sweet of you, thanksie for the bunnies as well ...
maa
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Congratulations on your Gold
Amazing work, Amazing wording,
Bravo to you,
Warm thoughts
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thanksie, frozen tears ...
that's so kind of you ...
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Yay!
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thanksie, sweet sister
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You speak with a great truth.Pride can be a curse as can ego.Well done, Ros
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thank you so much for your delightful visit, dear ros
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Beautiful and true
Wow, this really blew me away, it's all so very true!
And you have written it with beauty and have taken the wreath and made it your own, congratulations! Well deserved!!
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that's such a kind comment, hoodoolover, thank you so much ... I am very grateful for the clappies as well ... they always cheer me up ...
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that's such a kind comment, hoodoolover, thank you so much ... I am very grateful for the clappies as well ... they always cheer me up ...
marion
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Very nicely penned. Well deserving of the gold. Congratulations.
Thank you for sharing.
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thank you very much !
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Beautiful.
This is purest beauty and a pleasure for me to read.
I tend to be blind to iambs my self, yet this seems so natural, so flawless. It is a brilliant write!
Well done, as this deserves the higest accolades.
Bravo!
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thank you so much, dear tirell, for your appreciative comment and applause, it means a lot to me ... I'm just a student in poetry and don't have much experience, so I play around with meters, new forms and whatever comes my way ...
maa
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Oh, I don't know what to say! This is stunning and I agree with much of what has been said, Margaret's words and others...Indeed, as joy said you so much met the challenge of the wreath...
(and then some!)
And as ea said, 'Purely Wonderful' and it is, oh!
I, myself don't know what else to add, but simply so stunning a piece, wow!
Amazing and a winner for me, best to you in the contest and Thank you!
michele
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thank you so much, dear acqua, for your most delightful comment and generous gift of applause ...
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You met the challenge ...
I am so glad to see that you rose to meet the challenge of a wreath and did so adeptly. Nice work and good luck in the contest. Your words will not fall silent the next time I face resistence ... joy
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thank you, dear joy
I'm just starting to learn the art of transmuting the poison and of becoming immune against it ...
as my hubby says : "if you're nothing, nobody can harm you"
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Brava dear poet! The insanity of negative expressions is clear to see, and it can be contagious. Thank you for pointing the way out, to stand aside and see that anger is about the angry person's world view, and spiteful or abusive words are a veil they draw around themselves. Good work! This is also nice blank verse using the wreath form.
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thank you, dear margaret, you are my favorite therapist
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I am trying to pull my thoughts together for this contest. This is fantastic, maa. Exquisite job! P.S. I may not enter now because I won't stand a chance. lol ♥ Belle
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you ALWAYS stand a chance - against EVERYBODY !!! and I insist !!! I am sure that you are even able to make the whole thing rhyme !!! (which I haven't succeeded in ...) go, annabelle, go !
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You crack me up!! hahaha
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oh, this is fantastic. Purely wonderful. Thank you!
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thank you so much for your generous gift of a gold trophy plus the valuable points that go with it ... this was such a joyful surprise this morning ...
plus I learned a new form which I really like a lot ! thanks to your contest ...
marion
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