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Whispers

I hear your soft whispers
calling quietly out to me.
Your the one I truly want
but it can never be.

For you are already taken
and I will never be free.
So we must keep our longings quiet
only between you and me.

We will keep whispering our secret
so no one will ever see.
Hide all our wants and longings
behind the smile that everyone sees.

So please stop your crying
close your eyes and smile for me.
For the nights will be for us
when we meet together in our dreams.

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  • Bob Fox
    June 11, 2007

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    Delightful write

    I just love this poem. It says so much about love that cannot be. The mistakes made & the regretted. It should be a headliner on here. lol


  • Dirty and Broken
    March 28, 2007
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    very sweet


  • luvers4life
    March 26, 2007
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    sooo cute

    i thought that was so cute!!!!!


  • Dark Whispers
    March 25, 2007
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    truly a beautiful poem. great entry.


  • poetry within
    March 20, 2007

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    Nice flow. I got caught within this one right off. It captures you right from the start. Well written.
    Please keep writing! I'm glad you're posting. I'm grinning from ear to ear as I write this. I love poetry it's just something special within us all.
    Keep writing and inspiring my dear friend luvs yah *~ POETRY WITHIN~*

    • Sweet musings
      March 20, 2007

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      THANK YOU FOR SHOWING ME THIS POETRY SITE. I AM SO GLAD YOU LIKE WHAT I HAVE WRITTEN SO FAR.. I'M STILL LEARNING ABOUT HOW TO WRITE AND THE DIFFERENT STYLES FOR NOW I WILL STICK WITH WHAT I KNOW. HOPE I KEEP IMPROVING...THANKS SO MUCH SWEET FRIEND. LUVS YAH BACK
      SWEET MUSINGS


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    March 18, 2007

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    A beautiful love poem you have written. It is difficult to love someone who is already taken. I like the rhyme scheme you have chosen and maintained throughout your poem. One word of advise, it is best to write in sentence case and not in CAPS only. Especially as it can get hard on the eyes online.

    Glad to have you here at AP and please feel free to contact me or any online Greeter if you need help here at AP.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary

    • Sweet musings
      March 18, 2007
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      Thank you Rosmary. I used all caps because I am such a bad typist. But I will take you advice. You never know I might become a very good one after all.

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