//darling//
come [Closer] because
this [march of the fuckheads]
.is coming to an end.
&& [only] then will we be
aloud to [sin] disgracefully
girl;;
i can show you why [the beauty
of being numb] Can
.cum.
.cum.
.cum.
in handy.
because [happiness is slavery]
(when it comes to being in.your.arms)
baby
leaving hickeys on my collarbones
[with (your) teeth]
is like this delicious
kind of hurt;; that always
goes away
[leaving hope](ful)
thoughts of your +coma-inducing+ return
and [im looking forward to joining
you finally] (in between
these s-h.e - e.t-s )
cuz
you've promised 1 too many
x's
that you're going to rock my
world
sugarface;; im gonna hold you
to your promise.
.
.
instead of true love, you spoke softly
whispering lovely lies into my
ears
and scribbiling false memories
on my tounge
[once all that could have been]
(between us;; you fucked it up)
&& baby
your [ the great(est) collaspe ]
my ♥ 's ever (conquered/suffered)
Author notes
Word Bank F (nine inch nails) *difficult*
sin
happiness is slavery
closer
march of the fuckheads
only
with teeth
the beauty of being numb
leaving hope
and all that could have been
I'm looking forward to joining you finally
the great collapse
god this was amazing. dollface.
hope i did you proud.
♥
A contest entry
- Love, Sex, Pain, Confusion, Suffering... by sweetpearl.
1050 points, ended March 31, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is beautiful dear.
the flow of this made the emotions even more powerful
great work
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Alright, so this time around I really enjoyed this:
"because [happiness is slavery]
(when it comes to being in.your.arms)"
--it's kind of constricting yet you feel so happy to be there. Interesting. Again, the bit about the great(est) collapse, since it works without the bracket and with it, it's incredible. You're probably one of my favourites who can use words such as "sugarface". Thanks again for entering. -
"i can show you why [the beauty
of being numb] Can
.cum.
.cum.
.cum.
in handy."
Loooove this doll!
I bet you're gonna get gold =]
I love you ♥♥
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sugarface;; im gonna hold you
to your promise.
.
.
instead of true love, you spoke softly
whispering lovely lies into my
ears
and scribbiling false memories
on my tounge
[once all that could have been]
(between us;; you fucked it up)
&& baby
your [ the great(est) collaspe ]
my ♥ 's ever (conquered/suffered)
once again this poem is wonderful
i know i keep saying that in EVERY
comment, but its true =] ily sweetie
♥
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Wicked!
I love this, I normally find it hard to read poems like this, but yours are always a great read. Very good meanings and worth reading.
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can show you why [the beauty
of being numb] Can
.cum.
.cum.
.cum.
in handy.
because [happiness is slavery]
(when it comes to being in.your.arms)
baby
leaving hickeys on my collarbones
[with (your) teeth]
deeeeeeelicious,
love it
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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heehee
thanks babyface;;
haha im happy you liked it.
♥
-alexsis
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I like how you added in brackets, with and without the lines make sense (this is meant for the bank words), which I like. I like it a lot (Jim Carrey Dumb & Dumber voice, heh).
AHH I can't even think of what to quote. Do you know I have an obsession with repetition ... cum part was great. Maybe next time I comment I will have my head screwed on a little more ... you make it corkscrew off my neck, silly you.
The last line is genius. I really adored this. See you in the finals HAHAHA!!
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babydoll;;you smother me in the sweetest comments ever..you make me happy.
heh thanks for such a lovely contest idea..couldnt have written this if you hadnt caused the inspiration..
♥
-alexsis
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