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It doesn’t have to rhyme if it feels right

Hein sight is a wonderful thing
I feel its every rhythm in the birds that sing

The déjà vu of our daily routine
Bathroom soliloquies of teenage dreams

Political debates as to whats on toast
Some declare jam, others marmalade boast!

Farewell the actor calls, from the door of his house
To the strange vibe that shook, not even the mouse

Hollow inside, husky tone reverberations escaping
Through the verbal vortex of words I’m creating

Essentials and eventuals, according to and recommended by
Who are they to spread the wings of an angel and say where to fly?

Take me to the trees where once long into the past I felt the sensation
Of a previous life’s cornucopia of knowledge flooding my current manifestation

Fear or cheer your god’s names throughout your merry days
Or live a life of freedom where the world is yours play

As an outspoken poet and advocate for a greener earth
I encourage all the materialists to google define the meaning of worth

Technology won’t help, only hinder your quest for the truth
It’s in finding the eureka! that happiness will go through the roof

Little black books, wooden coffins and other tools of our trades
In looking never knowing, in knowing only enslaved

Victims of the culture, the acquisition and the power
Corporations devour the genuine, adding bricks to their tower

Replying to the offers that would rob the honest of a humble meal
The sensation that keeps the bitter guilt and ruins the scent of the real

In reaching for the stars we ask, was she pushed? or did she fall?
In truth she was never given the chance to ever reach at all

 

Grab yourself a pencil and draw for me your desire!

Now take this message to the people and with it inspire!

In writing I always question the need to use my voice
Then I think of poetry like a letter an eagerly await your response

Please tell me what you think

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  • soulless1
    April 5, 2008

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    hmm i am not really one for the techical side of poems or correct terms to use lol i might write but that doesnt mean i have to know what i am doing lol but this i like and i am sure there some correct term that describe exactly what technique u used lol but to hell with it lol i really liked it i loved the flow and the energy that seemed to come from the words it might take me a few reads to full understand it but then again understanding isnt always a part of appreciating if some thing is good or well written or if a painting is beatiful u dont have to understand it to appreciate its beauty and effectiveness or cut it up to find out how it works or what the writers motives where when he wrote it it just touches ur soul (yes lol not a good word to use when making a comment from one soulless person to another lol)
    and your glad for just reading it


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    April 6, 2007

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    I'm awed and energized by this poem

    Your use of language is quite encouraging to one who sometimes despairs of the blandness and banalité of the younger generations. I'm quite pleased to have "discovered" this poet, or maybe I've uncovered my own buried self to the same?

    Here too is even more rare, a poet who, as did Molière or was that Balzac who felt the mission of the poet was to advocate for the downtrodden, the poor, the underdog? or the endangered? Certainly there were more than one. Young Romantics Lord Byron, and others whose names don't immediately come to mind, once strove to bring their voices and rhetorical talents to the fore in the name of a bettering of the world for all and not just a few.

    I don't see much to improve here, but maybe a little bit of revision for the sake of smoothing out the rhythm, and an apostrophe where needed, and she'll or it'll be ready to sail the seas to seek The Land of Publishing.


  • Andi. gold member
    April 1, 2007

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    3 thumbs up!

    im gonna comment on all ur poems so I can get a gold membership! too bad if u mind

    luv dani


  • underdose
    March 19, 2007

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    Wow

    Tom that is brilliant
    You must have a lot on your mind at the moment, hehe.
    One of my fav bits:
    "Little black books, wooden coffins and other tools of our trades
    In looking never knowing, in knowing only enslaved"

    =]
    Nice writing dude
    x


    • Souless Poet
      March 19, 2007
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      Thanks Darren :-)

      Its always nice to get some positive feedback on a poem that you put your heart into. thanks again take care mate. FOB SOON WOOO GET IN! x

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