kiss me in the rain, and we will never forget. guide you in the night time through the smoke of cigarettes. always remember the smiles, kisses, and the dreams. kiss me when it's raining, let our wishes flow the streams.
hold me when it's lonely, and hold me when i'm scared. whisper in my ear all the memories that we share. don't forget the touches, brushes and the dreams. kiss me when it's raining, let our wishes flow the streams.
Author notes
not quite finished.. i may switch to lyrics for a while now, i'm back to being the primary lyricist in a band. is it complete and utter shit like i think it is?
skip the pleasantries, sweets.
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nice rhyme
beautiful rhyme
i dislike rhyme. in the way that i dislike drizzle because it makes my hair go frizzy. it's unpleasant and irritating.
but this, well, this blew me away.
it's pretty much stunning. ♥
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i think that these are amazing lyrics! remeber to put the chourus in though, i really want to see that! good luck to your band, and have your band get a myspace page so i can hear what you guys sound like!
LXF
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this is pretty.
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luff you. -
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Kiss me when it's raining so my tears are washed away; hold me when I'm lonely and when I'm frightened of the day; touch me when I need you and never go away...Kiss me when it's raining....ta da, ta da, ta da....
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Wonderful beginning line, "Kiss me when it's raining..." Run with it girl, lovely idea.
amicus...
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awwuh, boo, i loved it.
no, it is not complete & utter shit. its fucking gorgeous, just like you. ♥ -
I think it flows well for a song. I don't particularly like the last line of both stanzas ... kind of seems too forced to rhyme (cheese factor upped, you know?). I like these lines though:
"guide you in the night time through the smoke of cigarettes"
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"hold me when it's lonely, and hold me when i'm scared"
--they could make excellent lyrics, especially if delivered correctly. Let me know if you add on.
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