There's consolation in knowing
the rise and fall of angles;
the whorled tempests of
alpha and omega.
Liquid vowels
and hiccupping consonants
curiously curled around
the pith of visions.
Silent expressions
circumcised by dots,
paused by chubby tadpoles
that pollinate fertile thoughts
with deliberate moments.
Hyphenated hybrids
capture imagination
in new-sprung, cursive concepts.
But Oh! How I love
the silent ellipses
the endless music of
The End...
Author notes
Dried Ink
A contest entry
- Title Creativity by Celticmoon.
425 points, ended April 4, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In a Trice by lie.
575 points, ended May 11, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want Gold Trophy Winners Judged by RedwingSpirit.
900 points, ended January 11, 2008, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Love it. This is great, really good, an totally deserving of the trophies you got for it. I love the originality and the brilliant ending, it's great. Your wording is just brilliant, and I love the language you chose. It's a great write, and fantastically unique.
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A very uniqe poem with beautiful expressions. The background is fitting too and your thoughts are very compelling.
congrats on the lovely trophies and good luck!!
loveees,
transit~
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loved this.
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Excellent write
Congratulations on all of the Trophies.
Thank you for taking
the time to enter
into my contest.
I wish you the
best of luck.
RedwingSpirit
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Well this is a very interesting poem you've written here, and I like that
Really great how you added all those aspects of writing in this poem well done!
Thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
Wow, this is amazing. You combined a lot of great things that I feel all good poetry should have.
There was fabulous imagery- metaphorically, and realistic. You expressed the theme fabulously and you didn't give it away either. It makes it seem that there is more to it than just describing your love for words and writing. (or at least that's the topic I received from it)
The ending is just impeccable. You made the piece complete, and added a wonderful punch.
The structure of the piece was very clean and easy to read. The lines were nice and short, but they didn't lack in giving the overall feeling to th work.
Great job, a pleasure to read. Thank you for entering.
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Thank you
s This is one of my favorites
~Genie~
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But Oh! How I love
the silent ellipses
the endless music of
i love the way you have worded this. congratulations on the gold trophy you have earned in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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I agree that you are most deserving of gold. Beautiful work!!!
Raker
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Genie,
What can I say but I love this! Truly love this!
Your words and creativity with this title has left my mouth agape in awe. The beauty of the words that have been penned and dried upon this page certainly show the tender beauty of a true poetic masterpiece. I honestly don't even have the proper words to do this piece a proper justice in critique or simple comment.
Bravo!
Thank you for entering and good luck!
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beautiful
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"Liquid vowels
and hiccupping consonants"
I loved those lines! Well, I loved all of them, really...but those stood out to me the most. The language in this is rich but not overwhelming, and for me describes one reason why I have to abandon the computer at times to write free-hand. Typing on a keyboard, I eventually begin to feel separated from my work, and from the liquid feel of words right below my fingertips.
I can extend what I bring away from this poem to works I read...except that in the case of a really good poem or novel, the words "the end" are often met with sadness.
Thanks so much for sharing this most enjoyable poem.
Best wishes,
~J.
P.S. I think you might have an extra "the" in L1 of the last stanza?
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