Standing near my window,
I could hear the singing birds
But they fell off their branch and died
When you got lost for words
Outside in the winter cold
Where I lay beneath the sky
I can feel my blood freeze solid
Every time you start to cry
If the Lord could grant us wishes,
And His standards I could please
I would only ask one favor
And be begging on my knees
For a phrase that I could say to you
To take your pain away
I'd come close so you can hear me
And repeat it every day
Inside my bright lit closet
You say your standards weren't met
The artificial light burns out
When you remember past regret
I was starring at the ceiling
I was fine, then down it caved
Or that's what I was feeling
When you said you can't be saved
If I could just make you beleive
That you can be set free
If my words could turn to magic,
If my voice could stay in key,
Then I would play a song for you
To chase your fear away
I would tune up my guitar
And I would sing it every day
Please don't ever try denying
What I swear to you is true
If I wasn't forced to waste my time,
I'd waste my time with you
If you get stuck where you can't see me
With your demons poised to scare
Remember I'll stay with you
When I'm physically not there
I will make sure that someday
You won't fear the dark again
If objects had emotion,
I'd be pleading with my pen
For a poem I could write to you
To steal the night away
If letters could save lives,
I swear I'd read it every day
Author notes
Febuary 25, 2007... When things got hectic, I was put in a pshycward, but it ended up being a good thing... I met this girl there... I was just sort of attracted to her immidiatly and I couldn't figure out why... We became friends there and we still talked outside the pshycward, but I just couldn't figure out why I missed being around her so much... Then I woke up one day and I was like "HOLY CRAP I'M HALF GAY!".... So I told her, and we got toghether... As our relationship continued, she would call me in the middle of the night in panic because of her horrifying nightmares... so I would talk to her for a little while... And she always said she missed me when I was at school... So I wrote this for her. Just to put a smile on her face... because I can't stand seeing her sad.
username: Autumnsflame97
[1] Love. Sad love, happy love, broken love, I really don't care, just make it good.
A contest entry
- Bittersweet and Real-World Happy. by infinite spirit.
550 points, ended April 24, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write me a love poem (Girls Only) by soldierKFM.
375 points, ended April 26, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Love For A Girl by Converse Queen.
385 points, ended June 10, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options and shizz yeah? by Ilma.
600 points, ended July 31, 2007, 29 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love by Madison Mary.
650 points, ended September 10, 2007, 63 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MY FIRST CONTEST: I WANT LOVE RIGHT NOW. PREWRITES ALLOWED...COME IN AND CHECK OUT by the-gifted.
600 points, ended September 26, 2007, 109 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Dedications by Blooming Poet.
440 points, ended January 3, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tear Drops On My Guitar by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended January 11, 17 entries
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Comments
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Great poem! It's crazy just how much you can love someone eh? Goodluck!
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Ohh. My god. wow. This is so amazing. My boyfriend feels the same for me, I can relate to this so much. You are a preliminary finalist. Congrats. Best of luck to you
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aww this is very good. thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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what an interesting write and it's entered in so many contests that i just have to say, i'm sure it applies to many topics
best of luckj in the contest. be well and be blessed
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A unique piece. You just never know where your going to find that special someone. This is a well penned piece and enjoyable. Great detail my friend.
Good luck in the contest.
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Very Enchanting....
Thanks for you entry
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Wow. This was brilliant,I loved every part of it and everything about it. I'd copy in all the lines I loved, but it would basically be the whole poem lol, it was a breathtaking write, best of luck
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I would only ask one favor
And be begging on my knees
For a phrase that I could say to you
To take your pain away
I'd come close so you can hear me
And repeat it every day
Those lines hit me very hard. it reminds me of someone, that i love dearly, good job on the poem and good luck in the contes -
loved this.
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Great job. I really like it. Great imagery. Thanks for entering in my contest and keep writing!
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wonderful poem ,and it deserves the trophies it has received.it had a awesom rhyme and flow to it . please return the favor
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this is a very beautifully written poem, that would make an awesome song... the flow, rhythm and rhymes are perfect.. the love is so deeply felt by the reader, and I love the effect of 'every day' in this poem.. very powerfully expressed... I love these lines the most...
"I was starring at the ceiling
I was fine, then down it caved
Or that's what I was feeling
When you said you can't be saved
If I could just make you beleive
That you can be set free
If my words could turn to magic,
If my voice could stay in key,
Then I would play a song for you
To chase your fear away
I would tune up my guitar
And I would sing it every day "
beautifully written, well done!!
thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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wow this poem has been in alot of contests probably cause it's that good
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Awesomeness
Oh wow. This was too sweet. And what I find random, three years ago to the day, I was in a adolesent ward for a suicide... this was beautiful...and wished i could have met someone like that, but this was so sweet, and an awesome write. Great work all the way. good luck
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this was good. its a very heartfelt poem and i like it alot very very good job and good luck
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quite nice, i've said this kind of thing to my own special someone before. yes, you write these wishesall well as they're meant. thank you for the entry, i enjoyed it.
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Wow...that is so beautiful and heart felt. It makes me want to hug something *hugs a teddy*. I know, I'm an odd contest editor. What can I say? lol. I really love these lines, "Please don't ever try denying
What I swear to you is true
If I wasn't forced to waste my time,
I'd waste my time with you " So cute and so bold. I love it. Thanks so much for entering and good luck in my contest.
~Raine~
**If I had any applause, you'd get them. But since I don't, I give you invisible kudos. You can't put them on a page like the yellow clappies but this is good enough. -
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Oh, and, BTW, as you said earlier in your author's notes "Then I woke up one day and I was like "HOLY CRAP I'M HALF GAY!"...." Yeah, there's no shame in that and anyone who tells you otherwise needs to be stabbed with a spork. I'm dead serious.
~Raine~
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Wonderful write, I am truly touched. Not what I am looking for. I want the different between lust and love. You have showed a wonderful tribute to the one you love but not what the contest of mine ask for.
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i like this
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Its always worthwhile to write to make someone happy. You bright a smile to my face with this, Well done. I enjoyed it. Thank you for entering my contest.
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well, u like the idea but for some reason i kindof confused me. I thought you were talking about making someone believe and trust in god,then i read the authors notes. I see the touching and loving parts of your poem. i like that if god could grant you somehow to make them understand that you would do it everyday and it wouldnt be a waste of time. Well, great write keep it up thanks for entering!ood luck ♥kelc
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I like this poem. haha, and in your author's comment, "HOLY CRAP I'M HALF GAY!" haha, been there too.
It isn't entirely what I was looking for in my contest. I guess I should have been more clear on what I meant by meaningful. I'm sure this is meaningful to you, but it just wasn't exactly what I was looking for.
Nice job though, and thank you for entering my contest.
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