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Sunsetter

I once heard of a sunsetter
That prevents the ill from getting better
It's holding all of our hopes up high
Far away, yet it's hovering there in the sky
Like a bright, blissful daydream to fall back on
But what's beautiful now, in a moment is gone
And you're too unaware to know what I've found
What you spoke of before you left the ground
So sad that just shortly after it's birth
It had to be burried under the earth
So obvious, I was too blind to see
The sun-setting monster kept hidden from me
Until someone said to look up in the air
I never noticed the light wasn't there
Well I'm writing a note to that creature today
And within it's contents, I'm going to say:

Dear mysterious sunsetter,
You were hidden for the better
Under the edge of the earth, it drowns
I shut my eyes when it's pushed down
As veils of blackness remove all the light
I realize that he was right.

Author notes

Mid-December, 2006... GAWD... This reminds me of how much of how emo I can get. The inspiration here was this guy who I totally had a crush on... I was standing in the front of the school waiting to get picked up with him and several of my good friends as I always do at the end of school. Two of my friends went off to the other side of the large room because they like keeping secrets from me. This left just me and the guy standing there wondering what the hell they were talking about. He told me he was pretty sure he knew what they were talking about and he said that he thought my buddy hates him. I asked why, and he told me not to worry about it because it would make me sad and ignorance is bliss... only with that knowledge, it just annoyed me, because if someone says there's something going on that I don't want to know about, then it makes me paranoid. Later I found out that he wanted my best friend's nuts and he got super mad when she got a boyfriend... The "sunsetter" here refers to a letdown... The sun is the light of happiness and it's sinking into the ground.

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3. unrequited love

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  • liquidmindforever gold member
    December 19, 2007
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    Dear Poet,
    Please follow ther rules and place the words from
    the word bank in Author's Notes; Option and Word Bank
    are required.
    When you've complied with the rules, im and advise the
    name of your poem and I will then read and enter you
    into my contesT UNFORGIVENESS
    Blessings,
    liquid


  • forbidden-colour
    October 22, 2007
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    Creative and well written.
    thank you for entering


  • LadysDragon
    August 12, 2007

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    Wow,very good,and a imagery,thats good.Thank you and good luck

    ps-I noticed you love my contest!haha jk


  • xlilliexdiesx
    June 28, 2007
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    u didnt follow my rules sorry no warnings in this contest u are being DQed srry


  • agalford7053
    May 15, 2007
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    interesting...

    This makes me madder than it does make me sad. Guys are pigs sometimes. But then again... I guess we all can be. Your poems rhythem seems a little off to me. I can't excatly pinpoint where, however. You did a good job expressing your emotions.
    Great job!
    Ashley


  • Delete this polease
    May 13, 2007

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    A very intresting write. Thanks for entering and good luck. Its an emo write but its full of emotion and very truthful.

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